Now, on the grammar errors.
I found a common error on your text: confusion between possessive pronouns and verb to be.

The correct writing is the following

Verb ToBe versus Possessive Pronouns
Subject	To Be	Possessive Pronoun
I	am = I'am	mine
You	are = you're	your
He	is = he's	his
She	is = she's	her
It	is = it's	its
We	are = we're	our
You	are = you're	your
They	they = they're	their

For example, lets correct the following sentence in your text:
"... the huling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking theyre bullets"
Correct form would be
"... the hulling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking their bullets"

You had a few typos as well, you only need a second read and revision. Nothing really bad.

Now, on the grammar errors.
I found a common error on your text: confusion between possessive pronouns and verb to be.

The correct writing is the following

Subject ToBe PossessivePronoun
I	am = I'am	mine
You	are = you're	your
He	is = he's	his
She	is = she's	her
It	is = it's	its
We	are = we're	our
You	are = you're	your
They	they = they're	their

For example, lets correct the following sentence in your text:
"... the huling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking theyre bullets"
Correct form would be
"... the hulling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking their bullets"

You had a few typos as well, you only need a second read and revision. Nothing really bad.

Now, on the grammar errors.
I found a common error on your text: confusion between possessive pronouns and verb to be.

The correct writing is the following

Subject ToBe PossessivePronoun
I	am = I'am	mine
You	are = you're	your
He	is = he's	his
She	is = she's	her
It	is = it's	its
We	are = we're	our
You	are = you're	your
They	they = they're	their

For example, lets correct the following sentence in your text:
"... the huling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking theyre bullets"
Correct form would be
"... the hulling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking their bullets"

You had a few typos as well, you only need a second read and revision. Nothing really bad.

Now, on the grammar errors.
I found a common error on your text: confusion between possessive pronouns and verb to be.

The correct writing is the following

Subject To Be Possessive Pronoun
I am = I'm mine
You are = you're your
He is = he'is his
She is = she'is her
It is = it's its
We are = we're our
You are = you're your
They are = they're their

For example, lets correct the following sentence in your text:
"... the huling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking theyre bullets"
Correct form would be
"... the hulling shadow appeared in the broad streets taking their bullets"

You had a few typos as well, you only need a second read and revision. Nothing really bad.