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#ActualGearTreeEntertaiment

Posted 12 February 2013 - 09:54 AM

I am thinking of making a horror side-scroller and I need feedback on its story. Here is a background of the story:
Noliuk Pholos, the dictator of the Communist Produhk Union declares war on the Spiranmut Democracy. He was apointed ruler after the former ruler of the Communist Produhk Union was executed. Noliuk hatches a briliant idea to make a biological disease that will turn the people of Spiranmut against themselves. The labratory for the experimenting is built inthe Northern Produhk Mountains. A group of mad scientist create a disease, but it makes the host a crazy,murderous rotting monster that kills any living thing. The disease breaks out in the area around the labratory. Pholos takes the disease carry out of there and evacuates the area. When evacuating, Nicolai Kuinok is shot and suposed to be dead. The disease is put in poltury and the sent Spiranmut. After the disease breaks out in Spiranmut, Noliuk declares war on them.
Back in the labratory, Nicolai wakes up to the sound of something banging on a door. He was a patient in the testing of the Junski Plauge(Noliuks name for the disease, named after a crazy friend of his). When he wakes up, he is dressed in a straight jacket and boots.
That is my story at the moment. Any feedback is welcone and is greatly appreciated! If you think the idea needs improvements, or just plain sucks, please state so.

#3GearTreeEntertaiment

Posted 11 February 2013 - 06:31 PM

I am thinking of making a horror side-scroller and I need feedback on its story. Here is a background of the story:
Noliuk Pholos, the dictator of the Communist Produhk Union declares war on the Spiranmut Democracy. He was apointed ruler after the former ruler of the Communist Produhk Union was executed. Noliuk hatches a briliant idea to make a biological disease that will turn the people of Spiranmut against themselves. The labratory for the experimenting is built inthe Northern Produhk Mountains. A group of mad scientist create a disease, but it makes the host a crazy,murderous rotting monster that kills any living thing. The disease breaks out in the area around the labratory. Pholos takes the disease carry out of there and evacuates the area. When evacuating, Nicolai Kuinok is shot and suposed to be dead. The disease is put in poltury and the sent Spiranmut. After the disease breaks out in Spiranmut, Noliuk declares war on them.
Back in the labratory, Nicolai wakes up to the sound of something banging on a door. He was a patient in the testing of the Junski Plauge(Noliuks name for the disease, named after a crazy friend of his). When he wakes up, he is dressed in a straight jacket and boots.
That is my story at the moment. Any feedback is welcone and is greatly appreciated! If you think the idea needs improvements, or just plain sucks, please state so.


#2GearTreeEntertaiment

Posted 11 February 2013 - 05:44 PM

I am thinking of making a horror side-scroller and I need feedback on its story. Here is a background of the story:
Noliuk Pholos, the dictator of the Communist Produhk Union declares war on the Spiranmut Democracy. He was apointed ruler after the former ruler of the Communist Produhk Union was executed. Noliuk hatches a briliant idea to make a biological disease that will turn the people of Spiranmut against themselves. The labratory for the experimenting is built inthe Northern Produhk Mountains. A group of mad scientist create a disease, but it makes the host a crazy,murderous rotting monster that kills any living thing. The disease breaks out in the area around the labratory. Pholos takes the disease carry out of there and evacuates the area. When evacuating, Nicolai Kuinok is shot and suposed to be dead. The disease is put in poltury and the sent Spiranmut. After the disease breaks out in Spiranmut, Noliuk declares war on them.
Back in the labratory, Nicolai wakes up to the sound of something banging on a door. He was a patient in the testing of the Junski Plauge(Noliuks name for the disease, named after a crazy friend of his). When he wakes up, he is dressed in a straight jacket and boots.
That is my story at the moment. Any feedback is welcone and is greatly appreciated! If you think the idea needs improvements, or just plain sucks, please state so.


#1GearTreeEntertaiment

Posted 11 February 2013 - 03:24 PM

I am thinking of making a horror side-scroller and I need feedback on its story. Here is a background of the story:
Noliuk Pholos, the dictator of the Communist Produhk Union declares war on the Spiranmut Democracy. He was apointed ruler after the former ruler of the Communist Produhk Union was executed. Noliuk hatches a briliant idea to make a biological disease that will turn the people of Spiranmut against themselves. The labratory for the experimenting is built inthe Northern Produhk Mountains. A group of mad scientist create a disease, but it makes the host a crazy,murderous rotting monster that kills any living thing. The disease breaks out in the area around the labratory. Pholos takes the disease carry out of there and evacuates the area. When evacuating, Nicolai Kuinok is shot and suposed to be dead. The disease is put in poltury and the sent Spiranmut. After the disease breaks out in Spiranmut, Noliuk declares war on them.
Back in the labratory, Nicolai wakes up to the sound of something banging on a door. He was a patient in the testing of the Junski Plauge(Noliuks name for the disease, named after a crazy friend of his). When he wakes up, he is dressed in a straight jacket and boots.
That is my story at the moment. Any feedback is welcone and is greatly appreciated! If you think the idea needs improvements, or just plain sucks, please state so.

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