I can't really critique anything, well done!
You did the children's voices yourself? Are you some kind of kid prodigy?
I must say your compositions remind me very much of the more upbeat tracks from Ragnarok Online, which is a good thing.
Haha yes i did the children's voices myself! :~D It was kind of an experiment which surprisingly turned out alright! I was spurred on by this song and, in hindsight, Yoshi's Story!
I've never played or heard stuff from Ragnarok Online but listening now - oh my god! Yeah, this is definitely the kind of music I love to write. I think I've found a new soundtrack to fall in love with!