Errors that I have left to fix is the gap between the keyboard and the trackpad, I also need to texture it once I understand how.
Please give feedback and critique
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My first ever render
Started by Burnskagen, Dec 22 2011 08:16 PM
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Posted 23 December 2011 - 05:38 AM
Your model looks good to me, but there is one thing that's looks wrong however it could just be from the perpective of the image. The bottom of the touchpad looks like it was cut off from the rest of the computer.
What application did you ue to make your model?
What application did you ue to make your model?
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Posted 01 January 2012 - 10:15 AM
I have to agreement with Aluthreney on the touchpad, it does seem a bit cut out th body. Other then that it's quite good.
If I might point to some small issues:
- The corners are a bit sharp, they could use some smoothing.
- The same for the corners of the insets of the touchpad and the screen.
If I might point to some small issues:
- The corners are a bit sharp, they could use some smoothing.
- The same for the corners of the insets of the touchpad and the screen.
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Posted 01 January 2012 - 11:39 AM
Yeah I agree on the touchpad, I can see where you're going with it but how it's pushed in a bit doesn't seem right. From a user's perspective that might even be uncomfortable 
However, it's a pretty good model, especially for it being your first
However, it's a pretty good model, especially for it being your first
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Posted 02 January 2012 - 07:27 PM
The keys look a bit flat, probably because they are just a texture and not actually part of the mesh? Your materials and textures could use a bit of tweaking, but I'm guessing your focus is more on the actual model so I'll reserve judgement on that and see what else you come up with.
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Posted 04 January 2012 - 02:50 AM
The keys look a bit flat, probably because they are just a texture and not actually part of the mesh? Your materials and textures could use a bit of tweaking, but I'm guessing your focus is more on the actual model so I'll reserve judgement on that and see what else you come up with.
That is true about the keys. I guess there is a bumpmap function I do not know how to use yet but I will learn so soon.
