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#21 MrDojo   Members   -  Reputation: 127

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Posted 04 March 2012 - 07:06 AM

Hey Cassandra,

It isn't too vague at all, keep on writing since im interested with what you can come up with.

@ StormyNature,

I like some of your ideas, feel free to let your imagination go since your on the right track. Although I am not sure where you have gotten the Umbrella (resident evil?) reference from.

@ JefferyTitan,

Some nice writing Jeffery but we are looking for a different setting/character and a more "vague" type of story. What if the main character was an old man and the entire game consists of his memory's ?

@ March3000,

Some nice ideas you have there, some of which we were already trying to implement into our engine (but it's not so easy ha!).

@ DarkLink_

interesting idea for a game but it's not what we have in mind for this project. Your welcome to try again though!

Now let me post an image of the "early Alpha build" allong with some pictures:

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#22 Stormynature   Crossbones+   -  Reputation: 3421

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Posted 04 March 2012 - 07:17 AM

Although I am not sure where you have gotten the Umbrella (resident evil?) reference from.


http://www.defensene...mbrella-S-Korea

Fairly common usage with regard the nuclear defense systems esp. back in the 80's. Used basically as a descriptive term implying protection against falling missiles (aka rain). Not that any of them ever worked properly.

#23 Darklink_   Members   -  Reputation: 111

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Posted 04 March 2012 - 10:11 AM

Ok let's give this another try.



The man opened his eyes. He didn't remember anything. He got up. He could feel anxiety. What was going on? Where was he? He looked around him. He was in a wooden cabinet. Outside was night. He looked down on himself. He had blood on his hands. Blood! What had happened? He saw a piece of wood lying around by the wall. He grabbed it and walked outside.

Total blackness around him, though he could see the red leaves of the trees. He started walking. Noises were heard from all sides of the forest. He was angry but he didn't know why. Why? Why was there blood on his hands and where was he?

Suddenly a crack was heard really close to him. He turned around and readied his weapon. Two giant glittering eyes were looking straight at him. He clenched his hands around the wood, ready to attack anything that came his way.

But then another crack was heard. A crack behind him. He turned on the side so he could see both his bullies. The glittering eyes got smaller and afraid. A wolf started crying and the cry slowly degraded until there was no more.

The man was still looking at the side of the second crack. Noone was there. Nothing. No human, no animal and no beast.

After a minute, that felt like an eternity, he decided to start walking again. What had happened? Why did the wolf leave and why didn't he remember anything? Again and again only one thing was on his mind: What is all this?


He didn't know. But he was gonna find out. And he was going to do it reather soon.



Ok, hope that's closer to what you're looking for.

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Posted 04 March 2012 - 02:25 PM

Hi there. I'm a freelance writer looking to make more of a name for myself. My specialty is screen writing, but I also work in short fiction with a focus on sci fi, fantasy and horror. I kept the player character description vague, but in my mind they are a young woman, reminiscent of Heather from Silent Hill 3.


The player lives alone with their doting mother in a little cottage in the middle of the woods. In the distance a tower looms over their meager lives. Their mother will only tell them to stay away from it, and the terrible noises it emits night and day are enough to make the player heed the warning. They live quietly and humbly, as if at any moment that terrible spire will turn its gaze on them and everything will be over.

The player has a faint scar on her cheek, one their mother told them they got playing with a knife as a child, but the player has been having strange dreams. Darkness with a flash of light, a sharp pain in their cheek waking them in a cold sweat.

One day the player returns to the cabin to find their mother brutally murdered, nothing more then a maimed pile of limbs and gore scattered about the floor, yet her intact face is almost serene. A horrible creature lurks in the shadows, one of congealed darkness, dripping in old black clotted blood. When it approaches the player, their old scar splits open, sending fresh blood down their cheek to mix with their tears. They flee the cabin, sure the thing is right behind them.

But once they're lost in the woods, the creature is no where to be found. Shaken and alone with no where to go, they find themselves wandering towards the tower, the only point of reference on the horizon.

Shadows chase the player, sounds haunt them, and the thing, the creature, is never far behind. If it gets close to them their bleeding cheek grows worse, along with a pounding headache. The monster makes terrible noises, almost words, but they're choked and gurgled, and the player can only cover their ears and run from whatever terrible thing it wishes to say to them.

The creature hounds them on, never giving them a moment's rest, chasing them through places they'd never knew lay beyond the woods. It finally corners them, and the player is certain of their terrible death. Yet just before they pass out from the splitting pain in their head, the dark tower in the distance emits one of its terrible noises. The creature shudders at the sound, retreating back to the darkness from whence it came, giving the player just enough time to escape.

The player must traverse the dark labyrinth to try to find the secret that keeps the creature at bay, but instead they will discover a dark truth about their own past…

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Posted 04 March 2012 - 09:50 PM

Many of these stories written here bring back memories of Max Payne..
Anyways keep up the good work!

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Posted 05 March 2012 - 08:52 AM

Pieces. That’s all I find...pieces.

Pieces that are answers to questions that I don’t know. Not my questions. No...not my questions.

I know the answers are there. The answers to my questions like why do I hide when they pass by? Why do I hold my breath and pray to whatever god will hear me that they pass me by? Who are they? I can’t even answer that simple question. They come, I hide. Why can’t I face them? I am not weak but I hide. All I get is pieces. They offer no comfort.

I don’t know why I look for those pieces, but I don’t think I can stop. I don’t want to think what will happen if I stop. What happens if I hide to long? What happens if I stop? Why can’t I stop? God help me I need answers...my answers. Why do I hide? Why do I look? Please God let them pass me by.

Don’t breathe. Don’t breathe. Don’t breathe. I am not here. I am nothing. Keep moving. Keep moving. Don’t stop...Oh God don’t stop! Don’t breathe. Move. Move. Thank you God. Keep moving. Keep moving.

I can breathe. I am redeemed. Now to search. There is something here in this place, I can feel it. A piece, maybe The Piece. How did they hide it? Who are they? Why did they hide it? Why do I have to find these answers? Do they lead to my answers?

Stop talking to yourself.

Find the piece.

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Some brief notes: The scene is an abandoned building. I have made the assumption that given the focus is less on combat and more on hiding that combat comes later in the game thus the above scene. I have also made the assumption that the puzzles and exploration lead to answers, but given your theme of vagueness rather than determinism have gone the way I did. The religious aspect purely comes from an old saying "There are no athiests in foxholes". If I have stepped into the wrong rabbit hole with this piece let me know and I will create a different track.

Some separate notes:

@Cassandra. If you are not a writer, consider it - you have talent.

@Meagan. I hate doting mothers, but I really do like the element of the scar opening up, you have me thinking. Kudos.

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Posted 05 March 2012 - 11:08 AM

@ MeaganD,
The idea's of the labyrinth and the monsters reacting to the bellsound/tower are quite good. However I am not fond of the main character being a mother, nothing against them personally! ;). I find the idea of an old man much more original and appealing.

@ Stormynature,

I like your ideas allot, especially the one regarding the game world actually being one "bad dream". Maybe you can come up with some interesting ideas to complement that one. BTW, to come back at an earlier question: as off now we did not plan any interaction with NPC's besides the actual enemies. Well, killing the player is actually pretty "one-sided" ;)


My biggest goal with this game is to tell a story trough it's immersive environmental and visual design, without actually needing interactive dialogs. Having said that, I still like the idea of the player finding "snippets", "letters" or maybe a "diary/journal" inside the game world to make the player feel more immersed.

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Posted 05 March 2012 - 11:45 AM

@ MeaganD,
The idea's of the labyrinth and the monsters reacting to the bellsound/tower are quite good. However I am not fond of the main character being a mother, nothing against them personally! ;). I find the idea of an old man much more original and appealing.


I think you got the mother mixed up with the daughter :P

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Posted 06 March 2012 - 05:45 AM

Ok, as I didn't really describe the universe i had in my head in my previous post I'd like to do it now:

The main character is a man around his 30s, who wakes up in the cabinet as described in the previous post. After a while he starts listening a monstrous whispering in his head telling him he's a murderer. He also has a kind of premonition knowing dangerous thing that will happen but moments before they actually happen. Something like a sense of deja vu. Trying to find out what's going on he starts following animals which seem to want to lead him somewhere (wolfs, deers, butterflies). After a while and while has gathered a lot of pieces of his story it is revealed that his wife was murdered. Denying to believe that he was the murderer and while the voice in his head has become almost constant a creature emitting a red-light aura appears and starts to haunt him. He gets away and now the voice is telling him to go to the tower. Although he has never listened to the voice before he decides to go and find out whatever is happening.

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Posted 07 March 2012 - 11:54 PM

@ Stormynature,

I like your ideas allot, especially the one regarding the game world actually being one "bad dream".


I should point out for prospective (or current) entrants - this idea is in no way restricted -- i.e. if you can use it to come up with a variation or a storyline then go for it. Anything I throw up on the writing forums I consider as being available for general use, stealing, co-opting etc....unless of course I specifically make note to the contrary :).

#31 Stormynature   Crossbones+   -  Reputation: 3421

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Posted 08 March 2012 - 06:39 AM

The entire game world is actually the internal landscape of someone's unconscious mind (player, patient or enemy). The puzzles, mazes, enemies etc represent different aspects of the mind and provides insights. The tower complex is the key to escaping the unconscious world but is even more tricksome to get through than the outside. Unconscious by the way with respect to the subconscious, not simply knocked out.



Okay MrDojo here is a variation into the theme of a mindscape as the story behind your game

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In the moment before you die they say your entire life flashes before your eyes. This is not true. In the moment you die every regret you have ever had rises up to embrace you. That is the truth.

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The player has no knowledge or understanding of where they are, how they got there, nor even any real knowledge about themselves.

Each location in the game represent's a moment in time of the player. A moment when a poor decision was made. The buildings and locations themselves are symbols representing the outward from a decision for example a rundown industrial plant might represent a failure on the player's attempt to have made something work.

Inside each location there is a mini-story that delineates in vague terms the decision that led to that's locations creation. The mini-stories are not ones of regret but rather the truth of how the decision was made.

The active enemy npc's are a different form of symbology. Ones created from emotional decisions i.e. rage, hate, fear etc.

The tower represents the core persona of the darker side of the player. That which dominates the landscape and has such an effect on everything there.

Each step the player takes unravels the story of the man, until the tower itself is entered and the top room is reached.

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WIll add one or two more variations in the next day or so. And then I might even get around to putting one of them in a literary form :)

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Posted 09 March 2012 - 01:05 AM

your on to something StormyNature, looking forward to your progress!

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Posted 20 March 2012 - 05:44 AM

@stormynature

I really like the idea of locations representing previous decisions, even memories. Puzzles and clues in the locations could be direct representations of repressed or uncomfortable memories, similar to the dream analysis of Jung and Freud. It's been done before in Silent Hill and elsewhere, but there are always interesting ways of getting the locations to 'fit' with the memories.

What would be more interesting is if you could add an element of further repression within the game itself. For example, finishing a locations '100%' i.e. solving the puzzle correctly, collecting all necessary items, defeating all enemies etc, leads to the protagonist remembering the past event correctly, objectively, truthfully, then dealing with it. Not doing so (or perhaps choosing not to do so) means that the memory is imperfectly recalled or the protagonist flat-out refuses to address the issue. The memories you confront could be interlinked, so that the way you deal with them informs your path through (or up) the tower.

Very Silent Hill, but involving the mind and memory gives you the opportunity for some complex storytelling.

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Posted 20 March 2012 - 06:01 AM

"Time is fluid here.

I waited for days for someone to let me out. I cried and hollered until my throat was raw, until I spat blood.

I should be hungry. I should be dead from thirst. I'm not thirsty.

I might be dead.

There are words written on my arms in marker. On my left arm it says: Try to stay awake. On the right it says: David.

I think David might be my name.

The sound of the bell has kept me down here till now. When it comes I can't help but cower, hide in the shadows. It hurts. It hurts everything.

But there's no-one coming. This door won't open.

The only way out is up."

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Posted 21 March 2012 - 06:50 AM

This would be a cut scene! In first person, we don’t see the character yet, just where they are heading. They are running, heavily breathing. The rain is pounding down around them; the wind is rocking the trees back and forth and stirring up howling noises. The time is dusk, so there is still some light but the air is thick with autumn fog. The camera turns as if the character looks back, we see the looming tower in the distance. The character falls to their knees, all we see are two muddy, skinny white arms and the fact they are carrying a blood stained jumper. The character reaches the house (as seen in your first picture of in game footage), they turn the handle and rush inside. For the first time the character is revealed as the camera pans out. A dark haired twenty something woman, her face cut and her clothes torn. She stands now with her back against the door, catching her breath. She moves quickly to a table and fumbles about with matches and candles trying to light the dark house.

I would love to know more about whether it is going to be a set adventure that the player has to "follow" or whether the protagonist can go to the different locations by choice, sort of free roam so to speak and uncover clues etc as they go along. Also, sorry if you have already said this, but what platforms would this be played on?

Just to clarify...I have never written for a game before, extremely new to this, but if you like my idea I can run with it further!

Thanks,

Louise

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Posted 21 March 2012 - 02:50 PM

Interesting ideas Joshua_lux ; i'll provide some comments later on.

@Loulou15,

The player is free "to a certain extend" to roam the map freely in a way that provides and encourages exploration. Than again we are thinking of splitting the game up in several large areas rather than 1 seamless map (mostly due to technical reasons). By any means we want to make this game feel more open like "Stalker" (rather than corridor after corridor we see in almost every game).

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Posted 25 March 2012 - 03:09 PM

It was the early morning, the sun had just begun to dye the overlying sky a deep rich purple. I wandered through the woods flashlight trained on the deer tracks cut into the snow as they led down a steep embankment and I was met suddenly by a lake, wide and completely frozen over, that in all my years in these woods I had never seen. By dawns first light I saw in the middle of the lake the deer, framed on the shore opposite by a huge wooden obelisk. A wind picked up from the south and I heard the creak of its old timbers. This had not been here the week prior, I was sure. A mist began to spread across the lake and wound its way down a small gully some distance to my left, running the way I had come. The wind switched and everything was quiet again, eerie. I turned and, shouldering my rifle, commenced to scramble up the embankment. I began to walk hurriedly away from the tower without a backward glance. Some spectre or hallucination surely, I feared for my sanity, I would never tell anyone what I had seen. Turns out, I wouldn't be troubled by that. I never had the fortune of seeing anyone to tell. When I got back to town they were all gone, my friends, my family, my wife. All dead or run away or something. Or maybe I'm dead. If not, I will be soon enough i'm certain. The mist is coming, I can see it spreading out of the forest, black shadows rise up out of it and spin away into soft tendrils quick enough that you may not be entirely convinced they were even real. My only hope is that this will allow me to see my dear Joanna soon. They are coming Joanna, they are coming. Are you waiting for me wherever I am bound? Are you waiting?

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Posted 26 March 2012 - 07:16 AM

Hmm, if you want the game to be more 'open' then perhaps the idea of going up the tower is a little limiting. But if the areas are going to be quite open then the tower makes a great visual motif: wherever you are in the landscape you can see it, and it's an ominous shadow on everything you do. Someone has already suggested the enemies reacting to the sound of the tower. If the tower is always visible on the horizon it adds some agency to the sound it makes: the tower is 'controlling' what goes on in the game, it's always at the centre of what happens. It would make an effective 'hub' as well (i.e. you start levels there and always find your way back to it). I think that the more present the tower is, how well and often you can see it etc, the more effective the atmosphere.

I really like the concept of being an old man too. Games that are truly frightening always find a way to add vulnerability to the player. Playing an old man is quite a novel concept, and it makes you slow, old, fragile etc. Stuff is scarier when you can't just run away from it.

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Posted 27 March 2012 - 09:29 AM

This perfectly compliments a story of mine. A group of distant siblings are given the deed to their parent's dead friends' estate.There is a haunting but it's not random. There is no senseless violence but there is a lot of horror. My definition of haunting is being in the dream-like state when you're actually awake and cannot seem to run far enough or hide no matter what. There are personal secrets exposed and enough twists for it to always remain unpredictable.

Once renovation of the property is started in the mansion, the siblings are gathered in the foyer talking. The 100 or so painters and construction workers slowly disappear off the premises and are soon found huddled over something in a field. The workers turn to the mansion with the siblings calling to them from the gateway. The possessed workers charge, the siblings lock themselves in a room in the mansion with the demonized workers trying to find a way in. The first secrets are revealed from two of the oldest siblings which lead to a desperate race to a car where there are mysterious letters they recieved in the mail weeks before. This is where the mysteries of the family's past begin unraveling.

The siblings find themselves scouring the entire estate to uncover secrets of their families past and secrets kept from them by their own parents which ultimately drove them all apart. One thing about the haunting itself is that the possessed always seem to be lurking nearby, so characters are literally always on the run. They can be found in any dark corner no matter how well lit a room is. No matter how far you run from one location to a new one, there is a demon hidden in a dark area somewhere. Before anyone can uncover the reason why they are being haunted, the siblings are forced to uncover their own secrets and determine why their parents lied to them their whole lives.

Some siblings stay together while others are forced to travel alone and some even venture underground. Revelations don't necessarily mean a character is safe. Sometimes it means they could become trapped in a limbo and they are never seen again, which does happen to several of them. There are signs that a character is slipping into limbo but there is no way to stop it.There are no flashlights or cell phones or electricity of any kind and the reason is tied into the story. Other enemy types include alligators, stray dogs, snakes, and at times swarms of birds or stampedes of other wild animals through forests.


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Posted 28 March 2012 - 08:42 AM

Dude, that sounds quality! Reminds me of Forbidden Siren in terms of mechanics.




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