Nice work! I don't want to be a stickler by offering advice, but this will help two-fold; me listening intently and offering musical advice which I rarely do (because I'm new to it), and me potentially helping you. I am a young composer, so I hope you don't take any offence or anything.
The intro is beautiful! I wouldn't change a thing! The percussion and everything seems fairly nice and well balanced by that time. At 00:18, I think that the xylophone is ... a little too bright? At least for me. I would have tried to darken it up, to try and continue with the soothing, creamy texture you have going already. I think the transition into the pizzicato may be a bit rushed? Instead of letting the strings abruptly stop, perhaps you could let it fade out, and have the pizzicato line fade in? To help assist the change in timbre, as well as instrumentation? Just an idea.
00.57 - POKEMON! Right here, the only thing I would say is that you could possibly tone down the snare, so that it isn't overpowering the string quarter note-playing section. Don't make the snare invisible, but make it so that you feel a slight tug in rhythmical drive from the snare. (It also sounds a little dry, but that could just be my preference!)
1.26 is nice! Especially with the chorus. I thought the tambourine was a nice touch. (I think the tambourine could maybe use some reverb? It sounds kind of dry, but that could just be me.)
I think your outro was superb as well. I love that enveloping, unified, calm, tranquil sound. I think you did a great job conveying that.
I hope I didn't come off as crass or pompous! I should start uploading some of my project stuff for feedback. I love critique like this!
Edited by M4uesviecr, 25 September 2012 - 07:01 AM.