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#1 Stretch   Members   -  Reputation: 122

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Posted 08 December 2001 - 05:10 PM

newb here, just thought I''d put this down in writing before I forgot it, and I wasn''t sure where. Tell me if you like it, and I have any future in game writing whatsoever.... Some guy (we''ll call him "X") is looking for his brother. why? because his brother was killed by some thing ("Y") when he was....um....young. he (obviously) meets others to help him on his journey, finding an aunt and sister in the process, finally finds his brother, then finds out that his brother, "Z" is also "Y" that he has been looking for all his adult life. So he has to find a way to rid "Z" of "Y" so that he can have his brother back. Ok that sounds SO gay now that I have it down. doesn''t it? Btw it''s SUPPOSED to be an RPG.

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 08:27 AM

Nothing personal, but it really sounds like hundreds of other storylines from games and movies. The only thing it is lacking is a kidnapped hot chick.

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 08:30 AM

If you make the graphics really nice, and make it have multiple endings you have a decent chance.

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 08:42 AM

Lets say Y was not a brother, but was the father of X, we will call X "Luke" and Y "Anakin", then this Z guy (We will call him "Darth Vader") killed this Anakin guy, or so is Luke told by some other guy he finds on his way, we call this mysterious guy "Obi Wan", you know the ending.

see the problem here? it might not be your intention to make a copy of Star Wars, might have been subconsious, but in the end it sounds too much like Star Wars, you have to try to be original, and if you definitely can''t, then take some bits from here, some others from there, but dont just take a whole chunk and shave here and there so it is different, but really is not.



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Posted 09 December 2001 - 08:49 AM

I don''t see where there is a gay element in the story.

In case you meant to use gay as an adverb, grow up and stop discriminating other peoples preferences.

#6 Drizzt DoUrden   Members   -  Reputation: 100

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 08:55 AM

quote:
Original post by Askadar
I don''t see where there is a gay element in the story.

In case you meant to use gay as an adverb, grow up and stop discriminating other peoples preferences.


I was going to say something but it would be flame material... it had to do with Star Wars and gayI think you can figure out what I was going to say.

Right now, game development is so horrible you don''t even need a story.

Make a multiplayer rpg where you walk around trying to reach level 99 and hold competitions. Thats what games are becoming.

I hope this changes soon.

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 10:41 AM

Sounds like an algebra game to me =).

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 10:41 AM

quote:
Original post by Drizzt DoUrden

Right now, game development is so horrible you don''t even need a story.

Make a multiplayer rpg where you walk around trying to reach level 99 and hold competitions. Thats what games are becoming.




Actually that is where games have always been...Chess doesn''t need a story...Pac Man didn''t have one at first either...And you''ll have to dig deep to find one in Quake.

every game I''ve ever seen that features a story is entirely basied on plotlines..."character ''X'' does such and such", "Character ''Y'' must find the lost ''thing'' to do ''some activity'' that will help ''village Z''"...it''s all about characters defineing themselves through thier physical actions rather then through thier ideas, thoughts, resolutions, motivations, wishes, wants, needs, confusions, delusions, fears, and questions...game stories typicaly have no depth...


But then it''s entirely proveable that games do not need stories...




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Posted 09 December 2001 - 11:11 AM

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In case you meant to use gay as an adverb, grow up and stop discriminating other peoples preferences.

You really mean "in case you meant to use gay as a negative connotation...", becaue the English word "gay" ("..and Mary was feeling rather gay that morning") isn''t about to disappear.

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#10 Askadar   Members   -  Reputation: 122

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Posted 09 December 2001 - 11:20 AM

Probably meant that.

English is not my native tongue, so I maybe didn''t express myself perfectly.

But I still think that Stretch was using gay in the context of homosexuals.

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Posted 11 December 2001 - 02:25 AM

Hey, Stretch! It''s good that you are writing, and thinking up ideas. In the future, you should probably place your writing ideas in the Game Writing forum. That''s probably the best place to get feedback on scripts and such.

Askadar, English is not your native language? I wouldn''t have guessed. You express yourself very well. In fact, you write in English more fluently than many Americans.


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#12 Necrosis   Members   -  Reputation: 150

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Posted 11 December 2001 - 08:01 AM

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Sounds like an algebra game to me =).



Perhaps we could add a Calculus plot twist!

f(Y)'s friend is f(Z). However, f(Y) descovers that f '(Z) (derivitive) is equal to f(X) + f '(Y)! So they plot f '(Z) on a graph and realize that f(Z) is infact f(D), their arch nemesis! BUT, they realize that f '(D) has a limit x->0 so they can destroy him simply by dividing by x^2!

Hope that makes as little sense reading it, as it was writing it

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Edited by - SirSmoke on December 11, 2001 3:02:48 PM

#13 Askadar   Members   -  Reputation: 122

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Posted 11 December 2001 - 10:54 AM

Jonathon: Well, that''s maybe because I spent a year as an exchange student in New Mexico.

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Posted 11 December 2001 - 04:19 PM


quote:

Perhaps we could add a Calculus plot twist!

f(Y)''s friend is f(Z). However, f(Y) descovers that f ''(Z) (derivitive) is equal to f(X) + f ''(Y)! So they plot f ''(Z) on a graph and realize that f(Z) is infact f(D), their arch nemesis! BUT, they realize that f ''(D) has a limit x->0 so they can destroy him simply by dividing by x^2!

Hope that makes as little sense reading it, as it was writing it



unfortunately for our charaters dividing f(D) by x^2 sometimes caues f(D) to release a dreaded spell known as divide by zero, making f(Y) helpless because then f(D) is pulled into the undefined world. which can wreak havoc on the peaceful planet of math-land.

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Posted 12 December 2001 - 03:39 AM

But after consulting with the Old Nut in the Math Department, f(Y) is able to transport himself into the imaginary world by taking the even root of a negative number:
  sqrt (-X)^2  


After a frightening search, and traumatic adventures, f(Y) discovers the ultimate weapon - the hyperreals! The undefined chaos of f(D)''s unpredictable behavior is no match for Zeno''s paradox!

But the hyperreals are too much for f(y) to control, and reality itself begins to unravel. Before long, Elvis is storming the Bastille beside Tao, which flows over the battlefield like water. When Pasteur gets a craving for a lemon meringue pie, and orders Frodo to "just give it," things are so out of control that growth decides to kill all the sidewalks in Bavaria by melting emptiness with a fork. Sadly, the light at the end of the tunnel has been horribly depressed lately, and there seems to be no pickle in sight. Can this be resolved? Or is it too late?


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Posted 12 December 2001 - 10:52 AM

Hold on a sec... if this guy''s brother was killed, then why the hell is he looking for him? *sigh*

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