In my ears, it still lacks the "Oomph" you're aiming for, though
I agree with you. But I played around with it a bit and I think it sounds good now https://soundcloud.com/weaksauce-3/extremely-juicy-audio
for a number of reasons, including sound choice, arrangement and overall suspense and dynamics.
how do I make it more gripping and dynamic? maybe change things up like tempo and more variation in the song? I'll have to look into look into the theory more, thanks for the advice.