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maxd gaming    100
Edit. Added new copy with new dates... 2012: The UN convinces the last of __(#)__ countries to sign the contract which unites all the countries to one super-continent "Earth". For this a single government is elected, as well as a single currency. Once in power "John Smith" (governer) brings the armies of the world into one force "GD". It is meant to fight the one last threat known to earth. Terrorism. 2021: After nine succsesful years of a global alliance the tesion between nations had started to release. Nasa and other space agencies join together to form the EGEP (Earths Galactic Exploration Program) 2034: Having already colonized small parts of Mars EGEP looks toward research in other life forms in the universe. 2042: EGEP releases information on advanced life-form readings in a not to distant Universe. They also announce thier plans to find contact them 2056: EGEP announces the finish of a ship slightly larger than the city of New York, able to hold over 10,000,000 people. It is called GRUNTAKTICA and it is fit for exploring the most outter regions of space. Within weeks scientists, researchers, Troops from GD as well as wealthy citizens board the Gruntaktica. Meanwhile GD makes a staement to the council-members of earth of Earth asking them to consider turning mars into a large prison state. 2057: The inhabitnets of Mars are all safely back to earth (and enjoying blue skys and oceans I might add) and the convicts of earth for the most part, are on mars. On Gruntaktica everything is working fine as planned and they are well on course for their 12 year Journey. 2062: EGEP announces a loss of signal between Earth and Gruntaktica, but assures the citizens everything is fine, They are just to far away to be contacted with the technology they have at the time. End Of Intro * * * * * * * * 2067: A call of distress made by Gruntaktica is heard by an outpost space station owned by the GD. A large Fleet of Spacecraft is sent out to rescue Gruntaktica. 2068: The prisoners of mars send a message telling the GD that they can not send any more prisoners to Mars. From now on they will be a civilized group known as COM (Colonists Of Mars). 2070: The people of earth, so eager to see the age of space exploration come to life, seemed to forget of all the prisoners they were sending to mars. The COM had the supplies to create an army. An army much like the one of GD. A revolt of COM towards the GD caught everyone by surprise.OPERATION: LOW TIDE was the codename of COM's attack. A main power source for the GD was was located on the moon. So a suicide bomber armed with the largest bombs ever seen by man was directed towards a cold fusion plant on the moon. with over half of the GD's fleet out in search of Gruntaktica, COM blew the moon into many chunks destroying most of the remaining GD and screwing up the Earth's tides (and uhh what else is affected by the MOON?) MORE TO COME! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------


NEW COPY 2112: The UN convinces the last of __(#)__ countries to sign the contract which unites all the countries to one super-continent "Earth". For this a single government is elected, as well as a single currency. Once in power "John Smith" (governer) brings the armies of the world into one force "GD". It is meant to fight the one last threat known to earth. Terrorism. 2121: After nine succsesful years of a global alliance the tesion between nations had started to release. Nasa and other space agencies join together to form the EGEP (Earths Galactic Exploration Program) 2134: Having already colonized small parts of Mars EGEP looks toward research in other life forms in the universe. 2142: EGEP releases information on advanced life-form readings in a not to distant Universe. They also announce thier plans to find contact them 2456-2457: EGEP announces the finish of a ship slightly larger than the city of New York, able to hold over 10,000,000 people. It is called GRUNTAKTICA and it is fit for exploring the most outter regions of space. Within weeks scientists, researchers, Troops from GD as well as wealthy citizens board the Gruntaktica. Meanwhile GD makes a staement to the council-members of earth of Earth asking them to consider turning mars into a large prison state. 2560: The inhabitnets of Mars are all safely back to earth (and enjoying blue skys and oceans I might add) and the convicts of earth for the most part, are on mars. On Gruntaktica everything is working fine as planned and they are well on course for their 120 year Journey. 2662: EGEP announces a loss of signal between Earth and Gruntaktica, but assures the citizens everything is fine, They are just to far away to be contacted with the technology they have at the time. End Of Intro * * * * * * * * 2679: A call of distress made by Gruntaktica is heard by an outpost space station owned by the GD. A large Fleet of Spacecraft is sent out to rescue Gruntaktica. 2688: The prisoners of mars send a message telling the GD that they can not send any more prisoners to Mars. From now on they will be a civilized group known as COM (Colonists Of Mars). 2770: The people of earth, so eager to see the age of space exploration come to life, seemed to forget of all the prisoners they were sending to mars. The COM had the supplies to create an army. An army much like the one of GD. A revolt of COM towards the GD caught everyone by surprise.OPERATION: LOW TIDE was the codename of COM's attack. A main power source for the GD was was located on the moon. So a suicide bomber armed with the largest bombs ever seen by man was directed towards a cold fusion plant on the moon. with over half of the GD's fleet out in search of Gruntaktica, COM blew the moon into many chunks destroying most of the remaining GD and screwing up the Earth's tides (and uhh what else is affected by the MOON?) MORE TO COME! The story-line was written by a friend of mine of my ideas C&C PLEASE!!!

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[edited by - Maxd Gaming on January 16, 2004 12:06:15 AM] [edited by - Maxd Gaming on January 16, 2004 12:12:41 AM] [edited by - Maxd Gaming on January 16, 2004 12:13:05 AM] [edited by - Maxd Gaming on January 17, 2004 4:31:23 PM]
Operator    122
Well, I sincerely hope you aren''t trying for an even remotely "realistic" storyline here. This is further from reality than some of the fantasy stories here, and that''s serious flaw in a genre like Sci-Fi where the possibilty is what makes it so intriguing.

First off, can you seriously see all the nations of Earth being united into a single political entity by 2012? I''m from Canada, so we know a little about trying to get states to join/stay in a federal union - like that would have to be; it''s very difficuly. Hell, to keep ONE, ethnically similar majority pacified took us almost 30 years - and they wanted to stay! Now extrapolate for thousands, and you''ve got an impossiblity.

Secondly, you can''t have "not-so" distant universes. There is only one (quantum theory be damnned) and it''s very large. Your statement makes no sense.

Third, why is the ship named GRUNTAKTICA? Because it sounds cool, is my feeling. Generally ships are not named for nonsensical, if cool-sounding, words.

Forth, it''s frankly impossible to get an agency founded in 2021 to build a ship the size of NY before 2056. No production technology is even remotely feasible that would allow such a timeframe. Hell, the DESIGN phase would probably take that long.

Fifth, how is a "12-year journey" going to explore the "outer-most regions of space". As far as I know, faster than light travel doesn''t have any basis in reality or your version thereof.

Sixth, how did the transfer of ALL earth''s prisoners to mars take place in a single year? Sounds impossible to me.

Seventh, how are the COM able to raise an army and gain access to unimaginably powerful explosives on a barren, airless world that was designed to be a prison colony? "Well, we just figured we could leave the bombs there with all the prisoners..."

Eighth, why would a cold-fusion plant be on the moon if it''s powering earth? Earth has lots of land, and cold-fusion plants aren''t all that large (in principle)

Ninth, why blow up the moon? Why not just the plant? Sounds like drama for it''s own sake.

Tenth, seriously rethink this plot. It''s got holes the size of, well, that moon-explosion you detailed.

Good luck,
-Operator


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Nothing to it. Here''s what you do:

Expand the timeline so that it takes a few hundred years

Have the moon be TURNED INTO a cold fusion plant (with the capacity to transfer energy through space, like a radio signal)

Terraform Mars (if you were going to asphyxiate all the prisoners, you could have just dropped them into the ocean), and give the prisoners the technology needed to produce food, and have that technology powered by fusion cells that are converted into gigantic H-Bombs by the resident evil genius.

Change "not-too-distant Universe" to "not-too-distant GALAXY"

Have the main engineer for the interstellar craft project be named Joshua Gruntaktica.

Badda-bing, badda-boom. It''s airtight.

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Lantz    142
Is ''Gruntaktica'' supposed to sound cool? Worst name ever IMHO.

And according to some documentary on discovery losing the moon would be quite a disaster. The earth''s axis would not keep it''s 23 degree tilt, it would start to wobble, and this would give pretty interesting weather and no doubt massive environmental disasters. Polar ice caps melting causing sea levels to rise and funny stuff like that.

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Prozak    898
(continuing Lantz''s reply)
... not to mention huge chunks of titanium rock falling back into Earth and destroying all life (the axis thing could take 50-200 years to really matter i guestimate)...


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That''s why the moon has to be blown AWAY from Earth. After all, if the blast comes from between the earth and the moon, centrifugal force will whip the bits into space. The blast itself would have little impact on earth, because it would be directive by a magnetic field in the shape of a parabolic cone.

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Prozak    898
You cant generate a big enough blast to blow AWAY the moon, the amount of energy necessary to reduce to moon to dust is ridiculously high, and something that powerful would probably have an immediate effect on Earth, like shatering our magnetic poles, or ionizing the atmosphere or something...

Planets or planetoids cant just be blown away... the only method to do this is a next generation explosive i''ve thought of, the Golden Needle, but it would be so powerful it would probably generate a black hole...


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maxd gaming    100

Well, I sincerely hope you aren''t trying for an even remotely "realistic" storyline here. This is further from reality than some of the fantasy stories here, and that''s serious flaw in a genre like Sci-Fi where the possibilty is what makes it so intriguing.



uggg....




First off, can you seriously see all the nations of Earth being united into a single political entity by 2012? I''m from Canada, so we know a little about trying to get states to join/stay in a federal union - like that would have to be; it''s very difficuly. Hell, to keep ONE, ethnically similar majority pacified took us almost 30 years - and they wanted to stay! Now extrapolate for thousands, and you''ve got an impossiblity.



Dates can be changed...



Secondly, you can''t have "not-so" distant universes. There is only one (quantum theory be damnned) and it''s very large. Your statement makes no sense.


Hows not so distant galaxies?




Third, why is the ship named GRUNTAKTICA? Because it sounds cool, is my feeling. Generally ships are not named for nonsensical, if cool-sounding, words.


Got a better name? Please suggest?




Forth, it''s frankly impossible to get an agency founded in 2021 to build a ship the size of NY before 2056. No production technology is even remotely feasible that would allow such a timeframe. Hell, the DESIGN phase would probably take that long.




Hmm... Dates can be changed



Fifth, how is a "12-year journey" going to explore the "outer-most regions of space". As far as I know, faster than light travel doesn''t have any basis in reality or your version thereof.



I told my friend that, I was thinking 120 years... (opinions?)
Sixth, how did the transfer of ALL earth''s prisoners to mars take place in a single year? Sounds impossible to me.





Seventh, how are the COM able to raise an army and gain access to unimaginably powerful explosives on a barren, airless world that was designed to be a prison colony? "Well, we just figured we could leave the bombs there with all the prisoners..."



Critical story part was left out there (he forgot I guess):

They find a crashed ship on a dark "corner" of mars. Fix it up with some of the laser guns the Earth people left ''em (hoping they would kill each other or something) and went to a newly dicovered planet (by them obviously) and found what they needed built up a small economy and there you have it.


Eighth, why would a cold-fusion plant be on the moon if it''s powering earth? Earth has lots of land, and cold-fusion plants aren''t all that large (in principle)


Hmm, how bout a large solar plant or something.... better: they turned the moon into a large cold-fusion (wait... what is cold fusion LOL seriously) plant because they needed extra power for GRUNTAKTICA




Ninth, why blow up the moon? Why not just the plant? Sounds like drama for it''s own sake.


Read above... the moon is now the cold fusion plant


Tenth, seriously rethink this plot. It''s got holes the size of, well, that moon-explosion you detailed.


Well, thanks for the help.





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maxd gaming    100
Authority of Planets
Autonarchic Unity of Spheres
Heavenly State of Systems
Independent Territories
Industrial Empire
Mercantile Imperium of Worlds
Spheres'' Commonwealth
Sun''s Collective
System''s Collective
Worlds'' Oligarcy

Like any of those for the large government that runs the Earth?





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maxd gaming    100
Chapter One - 2163
The U.N. convinces (through means of threatening and bribing) the last 6 countries to sign the contract which will unite all of Earth into one large force. The people voted for the government. The old governors of each country are now leaders of specific departments. For this a single government is elected and a single currency is chosen. The governor “INSERT AWSOME NAME HERE” decides that they should pool together the worlds armies into one large force called the GD to fight the last threats known to man – Terrorism and crime.

Chapter Two - 2199
After many years as a unity the tension between nations had started to release, many of the larger American corporations combined with the other nations to create more advanced technologies. NASA combined with the European Space Agency and the Chinese Aerospace Corporation to create the GSTA (Global Space Travel Association) and began to design the largest and most powerful spacecraft ever – The Solar Explorer. They announced this to the general public via a worldwide news broadcast, they told the people that they would be selling full houses on this space craft when it was ready and they would be able to go on a 96 year space trip to the outer regions of space. The ship was designed as a self-contained community, the design called to put nutrient enriched soil in the ship, grow grass, carrots, tomatoes, and some other fruits and vegetables, bring on some cows and there you have it, a simple food-chain. The GSTA also sent a small army of robots up to the un-colonized sections of Mars, and began to terraform the planet to be entirely inhabitable.

Chapter Three – 2212

The GSTA releases some information about signals from “advanced life-forms” in one of the nearby solar systems. The life form has apparently advanced to the point where they have space shuttles and are also exploring for other life. The GSTA decides they are going to try to communicate with them. The government of Earth decides to begin shipping convicts up to Mars instead of keeping them in detention centers on Earth, so they order GSTA to recall there robots (which have terraformed most of Mars) and begin launching rockets filled with convicts up to Mars. On Mars, the government of Earth has built self-contained farms powered by fusion cells so the prisoners can keep themselves alive


New version... far from complete and is just a summary of what will happen in each chapter. This one was written one hundred percent by me!






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Prozak    898
Why would you send convicts to a perfectly good planet? that makes no sense!

In the future criminals will probably be easier to catch as pervasive technology evolves and invades our private "sphere".

Convicts usually get *very* bad deals, they would probably get sent to some penal colony on an hollowed out asteroid, left over from mining operations by some super-corporation, then bought by the government.


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Operator    122
Well, the rest has been stitched up rather nicely except for THIS:

"They find a crashed ship on a dark "corner" of mars. Fix it up with some of the laser guns the Earth people left ''em (hoping they would kill each other or something) and went to a newly dicovered planet (by them obviously) and found what they needed built up a small economy and there you have it."

So much is wrong with that.

First, why did no one discover that ship? By 2112 Mars will have been so well explored that such an occurance would never occur.

Second, why give them guns? If you want them to kill each other, just give them knives or poisoned food.

Third, how could a prision colony locate a new planet faster than a massively funded, world-spanning space agency could?

Cheers,
-Operator

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maxd gaming    100
quote:
Original post by Operator
Well, the rest has been stitched up rather nicely except for THIS:

"They find a crashed ship on a dark "corner" of mars. Fix it up with some of the laser guns the Earth people left ''em (hoping they would kill each other or something) and went to a newly dicovered planet (by them obviously) and found what they needed built up a small economy and there you have it."

So much is wrong with that.

First, why did no one discover that ship? By 2112 Mars will have been so well explored that such an occurance would never occur.

Second, why give them guns? If you want them to kill each other, just give them knives or poisoned food.

Third, how could a prision colony locate a new planet faster than a massively funded, world-spanning space agency could?

Cheers,
-Operator



Good points... read the new version... (below it is in a new post here not the edit on the main post)





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maxd gaming    100
quote:
Original post by cowsarenotevil
The story''s not that bad, but "Gruntaktica" sounds awful. Come up with a less grunty and more positive name.




Read the second story...

add: did cowsarenotevil.port5.com/ go down because of us? I am sorry, if we made you waste all your bandwidth.





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smitty1276    560
Think of a cool, profound word with meaning, then figure out how to say it in latin or greek... mix up the right cool sounding word and you have a ship name...

Examples:

diluculo : dawn, daybreak.

expiscor : to fish out, find out, discover

resurrectio : f, resurection, awakening, renewal.

novus : new, fresh, young, inexperienced, revived, refreshed
aetas : an age, stage, period of life, time, era.

saecula saeculorum: to all eternity, without end, lifetime, age.

I don''t know... just an idea. Have fun. Here''s an English to Latin dictionary online:
http://www.arts.cuhk.edu.hk/Lexis/Latin/

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quote:
Original post by smitty1276
Think of a cool, profound word with meaning, then figure out how to say it in latin or greek... mix up the right cool sounding word and you have a ship name...

Examples:

diluculo : dawn, daybreak.

expiscor : to fish out, find out, discover

resurrectio : f, resurection, awakening, renewal.

novus : new, fresh, young, inexperienced, revived, refreshed
aetas : an age, stage, period of life, time, era.

saecula saeculorum: to all eternity, without end, lifetime, age.

I don''t know... just an idea. Have fun. Here''s an English to Latin dictionary online:
http://www.arts.cuhk.edu.hk/Lexis/Latin/



Hmm maybe The Expisicor (read: added i)








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maxd gaming    100
Here is the begining to the prelude.


Prelude – year 2163
“People of Earth, I – Fannus Noffe - am proud to tell you, that today, all the governments, on this wonderful planet, have agreed, that they, will all join together, into one large conglomeration. We will be holding an election, to elect a government, in slightly over 2 months. The governments running are now listed on the display behind me”
“The Liberation Army
The Independence
Divine Nations
Liberated Nations
Confederated Republic
The Republic of Constellations” appeared on the hefty projection screen in the crowded theater-like room in a large beige print
“You will also, be voting on a currency during that election.” Fannus stated, as the screen behind him changed into a large picture of a dollar sign, euro sign and yen sign.
“This broadcast, has now ended.”

All the people in the diminutive ship began to applaud happily.
“We are coming back into Earth’s atmosphere please stay in your seats” whined a voice through the speaker.
Everyone sat down and looked up at the large screens displaying information about the velocity, gravitational pull and tilt of the craft. The velocity display was glowing red, the ship was falling to rapidly.
“Everyone stay calm, we have everything under control” said that same voice through the speaker.
“Oh yeah, sure you do” said one of the more obvious voices in the crowd.
Scientist Damon Gruntaktica looked down at his small 6.4tHz laptop computer, quickly typed something and then faded into darkness, reappearing 45 seconds later at the National Institute for Science and Technology.
“The experiment worked sir” said Gruntaktica





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[edited by - maxd gaming on January 18, 2004 2:44:58 AM]