Your dad has great potential for this game and I am glad that you took the initiative time and care to bring the game back as the story says back from the grave. The keeper of the garden.

From my initial thought of the view of the garden, I wasn't expecting the garden to be such a very large size. I have not seen a mile wide or long garden before unless your talking about a garden pasture. The premise of the game sounds intriguing, but what about the replay value?

I wouldn't mind taking the time to replay the game but what will it make it interesting to keep going other than the story line and matching the rose colors to move along the course to the next area of the garden.

I think it would be a suggestion to have different themes from garden to garden to have for the player wanting to explore your storyline.

Have waterfalls and animals and classical music for some parts of the garden and then when something is about to happen use subtle change of the music to hard rock music or suspenseful music like the roses are being taking away from the birds and bees or whatever will be taking the flowers away.

I think you should have the roses in their different colors be the puzzle part of the game. Find these elusive roses and bring them to the keeper of the grave so he can hold on to them for the player so he or she can escape from the enchanted garden. Weather effects would be a nice addition to the game as well.

Mood and music helps a story come to life.

For the beginning of your story concept.

1900's London
Early morning. 9 am.
Foggy.

An old woman wearing tatters eagerly waits for customers to buy her roses from her bucket. A few men and women walk by. Some adults with children in hand. One child walks by with her hand in her mother's. The rose peddlar leans down, smiles and the child returns her smile. The adult was uncertainly not having any sort of this and pulls the child away. "Come on child." The mother scorns.

The old woman stands up while watching the child dissappear into the London Fog.
The rose peddlar smile becomes a sigh. All she wanted to do is put a smile on someone else's face.

In the distant from the rose peddlars' left. There was heavy foot steps clunking on the cobble stone steps. The steps became closer and closer. She sees a man or woman in a hurry. She looks back at her rose bucket and gathers a blue rose and announces that her roses are for sale.

"Roses for sale. Roses for sale" The rose peddlar repeated. The young man or woman in his/her mid 20's hears this bantering from the peddlar. Scoffs and mouths under his/her breath. "Wonderful" he/she says. "Why is this person trying to sell something that could be fake, or cheaply made? I have no time for this. Must keep going. I'm late to work."

"Roses for sale. Roses for sale" The peddlar called out again. The young man came close to her and looked down trying to be unseen. "Roses for sale. Sir! or Ma'am. Would you like to by a rose from me?" she politely asked. Within the young man's fourth step away from her, his cane felt into a knotch within the cobble stone steps. Making him catch his step nearly falling foward onto the sidewalk.

"Ma'am / Sir." Roses for sale?" She said to the young man or woman. The man or woman gathered his/her self up and straighten his/her hat, his/her scarf and his/her coat. The peddlar stretched out her right hand with a blue rose in it. "I heard you the first time madam." He/she said without looking. I am late for work.

Can you not see that?" he/she turned to face her. "Yes and no" she said. "Yes and no?" he/she repeated and grabbed the cane out of the crack and walked right up to her and lifted his cane to his hat and lifted it off his head onto his cane. "Well, I see you are in a rush. In a furry as well, and you were on your way to some where important." she said. "True. And the No part?" he/she countered. "The no part. Well you were intrigued."she answered. "What do you mean by that?" he/she said. "You were in a rush, you came back and wanted to say something to me. You wanted to hear my offer. But you didn't leave. You had all the right to move forward. But you didnt." the peddlar exclaimed. "Fine. Be quick about your sale. I am running late." he/she said.

"Roses are five dollars." she said. "What! For a single rose or for the whole bucket?" he shouted. Then looked around hoping no one heard him. "Sir or Ma'am. These roses are no ordinary roses." she exclaimed again. "Five dollars? No! You have certaintly wasted my time." He/she said closely to her and walked off.

"Sir or Ma'am! These roses are enchanted." She shouted to the young man or woman. "So are the soles of my feet. "One whiff and you will be wisked away to an enchanted land." the peddlars voice traveled down the narrow street.

The soles of the young man's or woman's feet came back to meet the peddlars. "Your story is worth five dollars. The young man/woman hands the money to the old woman.

"But <ma'am> / <sir> be warned." "For where the rose takes you, depends on on the strength of your character and the quality of your...”

The young <ma'am> / <sir> cuts her off and takes the blue rose from the peddlar's hand.

You take a whiff of the rose. You vaguely remember an enchanting scent as everything goes dark. *screen fades to black*
You feel the ground slipping from beneath your feet...

I hope you like the added version and some edit to your story Mark.

Your quite welcome.

When I read your dollar amount several times I was thinking it would be a modern storyline, this story came to me instantly and went for a 1900's look. I did think this was strange for the amount of the revision of the story but I left it up for you to change.

I am glad that the revision to your story is what you are looking for.

The tile setting. I wasn't thinking about the past version of screen resolution. I see what you mean now. Yeah. Your choice of screen resolution would be perfect.

How many themes are you thinking of for the storyline or game in itself.

How is your project coming along? Any new ideas, or suggestions for your project? Would like to hear them. Would you like some more help your project?

How is your project coming along? Any new ideas, or suggestions for your project? Would like to hear them. Would you like some more help your project?

Thanks for the interest.

Right now, the project is indefinitely delayed. I am struggling with whether to make this a top-down 2D game like my dad originally did or covert it to 3D. Either way, the coding will not be too difficult, but I have to decide before I can get to the graphics. And that is a whole other issue. I am NOT an artist. Any artwork I make will be very clearly programmer art and I cannot afford to pay for professionally done artwork. Then there are sounds and music. This is even further beyond my talents than the artwork.

So, I do not know where to go from here.

Hey Mark, Glad to hear from ya again. You better believe it. I am still interested in your game. Glad to see that your still working on your dad's project with or own spin on things. When I read your dad's storyline and then made my own stoyrline path with the England visuals, I was at that time and still leaning toward the 3D version. It will give you and your dad's game more depth. Immersing the players into that era and place on Earth. Which ever decision or decisions you make, don't second guess yourself. The game design document as tons of potential of beginning a new lease on life with your knowledge from your dad's. Keep up the great work and don't let little details bog you down from over seeing the bigger picture. The more you pratice at programming and better you design the art, it will look great no matter what. Patience is the key my friend. And from the looks of it, you still have it and working diligently to get the game loaded to play the final product.

Will be looking in from time to time and see how things go with your project.