Hi guys,
I wrote this piece recently originally for a client but decided to keep it for myself as I think it turned out great. Basically, I'm looking for feedback on the musicality of it and not so much the production.
Please do let me know what you think! And also, please link anything I can look at of yours below.
All the best,
Jed
Hi Jed,
Nice work ! I like the mood you create with the pedal of D. Is it a 4 hands piece ? Maybe i would add at 1:42 new rythms at left hand to make a difference with the beginning. It could bring something more energic and then make the direction of the piece clearer. But i don't know the client's intentions for ...
I tryed to add 3 eighth notes "A C D" at the left hand every 2 bars, to add a sort of cadential mvt, that's what inspired me...
The chromatic progression is a good idea and it sounds great, tell me if i'm wrong, you go down most of the time with major chords? maybe i would add more extra notes to put the attention more on the colors of the chords and less the chromatism especially at the beginning of the chormatic progression.
There are my ideas ... 
Yo.
Hey,
Thanks for sharing your piece! I enjoyed the opening but felt some of the grace notes were played unrealistically. When I'm improvising, I often play the grace notes a bit softer. Also some of the chromaticism didn't work as well for me but that could be a personal taste. One other thing you might consider is contrary motion as often your outer voices moved in the same direction.
Overall, though, I dug it! I loved the ending!
Thanks,
Nate
It's a bit choppy and heavy handed. The phrasing in both the harmonic movement (that's means going from chord to chord), and the motivic riffs in the melody snippets were pretty mechanical. It didn't move or progress, it just kind of sat there. Wasn't digging the mode mixture either. I thought there were some pretty odd sounding notes in your mini-melodies over certain chords.
There's a pretty honest attempt at creative chord voicing though. And that aspect wasn't bad in my opinion. The concept itself was probably the strongest thing the song has going for it.
