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In my turn-based, RPG game, Forsaken Alchemy, I plan to have voiced character monologues and dialogues play along with some character animations after every battle, and I'd like to hear your thoughts on if wording is presented to be realistic in speech patterns, how all the characters sound in personality, if they sound similar in personality to each other, and any feedback on anything. There are in-battle criteria to trigger certain quotes more often than others, but I won't bore you with them. I just wanted to put that out in case you were curious how the below criteria matters in probability.

Every quote in the solo quotes spoiler box is an instance of the character having a monologue. It's not him/her saying every single quote after one battle, so RNG will decide which of the listed solo quotes will play alone after a battle. For example,

"Yes! I won!"

and

"That was easy!"

are randomly picked per battle. The person is not saying, "Yes! I won! That was easy!"

Solo quotes:

Spoiler

 

Alvis solo quotes:
“Phew, the battle’s over.”
“I managed to stay alive.”
“Class dismissed.”
“This was enough to pass with my life.”
“Thank goodness the fight’s done.”

Victoria solo quotes:
“You brought this upon yourselves.”
“Do try harder next time you fight us.”
“What a disappointment on the enemy’s behalf.”
“Just as I predicted.”
“It’s time for us to move on.”

Krissy solo quotes:
“That’s enough for now.”
“Was fighting really necessary?”
“If only we could’ve talked things out.”
“I wish I could forget this ever happened.”
“Things just couldn’t work out peacefully.”

Rosch solo quotes:
“We’re finished here.”
“That about does it.”
“The battle may be over but conflict isn’t.”
“If I must, I’ll fight anything in my way.”
“Out of sight and out of mind.”

Erwin solo quotes:
“Alright, how about some shut-eye?”
“Wake me up when something interesting happens.”
“What a bore.”
“Take five.”
“Finally, some relaxation.”

Mariel solo quotes:
“Woohoo! Nothing like some exercise to keep you up!”
“Operation Relax is a go-go!”
“I’m ready for a rematch anytime if you were still alive.”
“Wow, that was a cinch!”
“Done and done!”

Sarah solo quotes:
“It’s not over yet. We’ve got a mission to finish.”
“Let’s celebrate victory AFTER we return to base.”
“You’ve wasted enough of our time.”
“I’ll give no mercy to those in our way.”
“No rest for the wicked.”

Fausty solo quotes:
“Cue fanfare!”
“As if I could lose to the likes of you.”
“Tell the underworld who sent you packing.”
“Who’s the bestest? Me, of course!”
“Anyone else want a butt whupping?”

 

When there's an empty line of space between dialogue, that means the next line is the start of a new dialogue. For the example below, after the second quote from Alvis is a different instance of dialogue that plays if RNG picks that to be played instead of the previous instance.

Alvis: “I wish I knew even half as much knowledge that you know.”
Victoria: “In time, you will.”
Alvis: “That’s a pretty optimistic view.”

Victoria: “For a scholar, you did well in that fight.”
Alvis: “I’m just lucky I got out of it with everything intact.”
Victoria: “You should be more confident about your keen strategies.”

Group quotes:

Spoiler

 

Alvis and Victoria quotes (if Alvis’s current HP < half max HP):
Alvis: “I thought I was going to die there.”
Victoria: “Take this battle as a lesson to learn from.”
Alvis: “Good idea.”

Alvis and Victoria quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Alvis: “I wish I knew even half as much knowledge that you know.”
Victoria: “In time, you will.”
Alvis: “That’s a pretty optimistic view.”

Victoria: “For a scholar, you did well in that fight.”
Alvis: “I’m just lucky I got out of it with everything intact.”
Victoria: “You should be more confident about your keen strategies.”

Alvis and Victoria quotes (if fish was thrown by Alvis):
Alvis: “That fish sure did something, huh?”
Victoria: “Yes, you’re starting to get an idea for how monsters behave.”
Alvis: “For better or worse.”

Alvis and Krissy quotes (if Alvis’s current HP < half max HP):
Alvis: “I thought I was going to die there.”
Krissy: “We have to be more careful so that never happens again.”
Alvis: “Agreed. I'll try not to let it happen again.”

Alvis and Krissy quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Alvis: “I’m glad there’s a doctor, like you, fighting beside me.”
Krissy: “I’ll be here for you, but don’t lower your guard.”
Alvis: “Got it. Stay focused but don’t be reckless.”

Krissy: “I hope those monsters find peace where they are now.”
Alvis: “I’m sorry.”
Krissy: “Don't feel sorry. It was either them or us.”

Alvis and Rosch quotes (if Alvis’s current HP < half max HP):
Alvis: “I thought I was going to die there.”
Rosch: “If things start to look bad, don't hesitate to let me know. I got your back.”
Alvis: “I will. Thank you.”

Alvis and Rosch quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Alvis: “That battle was a good test of the enemies around here.”
Rosch: “We might’ve done well back there, but monsters can always change their strategy.”
Alvis: “And so can we if that ever happens.”

Rosch: “Nice teamwork, man!”
Alvis: “Thanks, and the same goes to you.”
Rosch: “I hope we can always keep this rhythm.”

Alvis and Fausty quotes (if Alvis’s current HP < half max HP):
Alvis: “I thought I was going to die there.”
Fausty: “Well, you didn't, so don't worry about it!”
Alvis: “Easier said than done.”

Alvis and Fausty quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Alvis: “Fighting alongside you feels like a rush of air behind me.”
Fausty: “And fighting alongside you feels like I’m flipping pages in a dictionary.”
Alvis: “I don't know if I'm supposed to feel complimented or insulted.”

Fausty: “The heroes win another fight!”
Alvis: “Could you please stop with the hero talk already?”
Fausty: “Onward, to the next battle!”
Alvis: “Wait, I changed my mind! Don’t pick fights for us!”

Krissy and Victoria quotes (if Krissy’s current HP < half max HP):
Krissy: “My life almost wilted in that battle.”
Victoria: “Treat your wounds and rest. I’ll wait for you.”
Krissy: “I appreciate your patience.”

Krissy and Victoria quotes (if fish was thrown by Victoria):
Krissy: “Did you really have to throw that poor fishy?”
Victoria: “It served its purpose. Don’t you agree?”
Krissy: “I can’t deny that, but…”

Krissy and Victoria quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Krissy: “Do you think we could’ve avoided fighting?”
Victoria: “Maybe. Maybe not.”
Krissy: “Never a straight answer from you, huh?”

Victoria: “How do you think those monsters felt?”
Krissy: “Felt? Agitated, anguished, and possibly hateful toward us.”
Victoria: “You’re on the right track.”

Krissy and Alvis quotes (if Krissy’s current HP < half max HP):
Krissy: “My life almost wilted in that battle.”
Alvis: “Let’s plan the next one better.”
Krissy: “Good outlines do make for polished results.”

Krissy and Alvis quotes (if fish was thrown by Alvis):
Krissy: “Did you really have to throw that poor fishy?”
Alvis: “I-I’m sorry, but it made a difference, right?”
Krissy: “Well, yes, but it’d be nice if you could fight without relying on bait.”

Krissy and Rosch quotes (if Krissy’s current HP < half max HP):
Krissy: “My life almost wilted in that battle.”
Rosch: “Don’t try shouldering the burden alone. I’m here for you.”
Krissy: “Aw, you’re my knight in shining armor, as usual.”

Krissy and Rosch quotes:
Krissy: “Are you hurt?”
Rosch: “Kind of, but it’s nothing serious.”
Krissy: “Please don’t wait until it is serious. Healing small wounds will stop them from becoming serious ones. I’m a doctor fighting right next to you, so be sure to tell me if you’re hurt!”
Rosch: “O-okay.”

Rosch: “Are you hurt?”
Krissy: “If I was hurt, I would tell you.”
Rosch: “A-alright, I was just checking.”

Krissy and Fausty quotes (if Krissy’s current HP < half max HP):
Krissy: “My life almost wilted in that battle.”
Fausty: “So, do you want me to use a watering can on you?”
Krissy: “Do I look like a plant?”

Krissy and Fausty quotes:
Krissy: “With your body, I’m surprised you don’t kickbox, too.”
Fausty: “Sure I do. Look how fast I’ll swing my leg by your head. Did you see?”
Krissy: “No, because you didn’t even move.”

Fausty: “One bloodbath down, and a whatever amount more to go. Next!”
Krissy: “You want more?”
Fausty: “More than anyone could imagine. It’s for bragging rights to any vampires I see.”

Rosch and Erwin quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Erwin: “Some sleep oughta fix that up.”
Rosch: “Give me a break, figuratively speaking.”

Erwin and Rosch quotes (if Erwin’s current HP < half max HP):
Erwin: “I’m so beat, literally and figuratively speaking.”
Rosch: “Don’t you think this is karma telling you to fight harder?”
Erwin: “Nah.”

Rosch and Erwin quotes:
Rosch: “What’ll it take for you to go all out?”
Erwin: “How ‘bout a battle tougher than the one we just did? Not sure if you’ll handle it, though.”
Rosch: “I’m up for the challenge if I get to see you working hard.”

Erwin: “Why not take opportunities like this to chill out?”
Rosch: “Because danger could be waiting for us to do just that.”
Erwin: “Ok, I’ll keep watch over you. Sound good?”
Rosch: “That sounds even more dangerous.”

Rosch and Mariel quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Mariel: “Yeah, you’re a wrecking ball of boring with that attitude!”
Rosch: “Is that supposed to make myself feel better?”

Mariel and Rosch quotes (if Mariel’s current HP < half max HP):
Mariel: “Holy cow, that battle knocked my socks off!”
Rosch: “You don’t sound too beat up over it.”
Mariel: “That’s cuz I’m not, but I was impressed!”

Rosch and Mariel quotes:
Rosch: “The fight’s over now, so calm down a bit, ok?”
Mariel: “Trying to calm down just makes me wanna be excited, so no siree!”
Rosch: “It was worth a shot.”

Mariel: “Let’s do a dance of victory!”
Rosch: “I don’t dance.”
Mariel: “Then, I’ll take the lead instead!”
Rosch: “W-whoa! Hold on, I never agreed to this!”

Rosch and Sarah quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Sarah: “Then pick yourself up. We need each other in one piece.”
Rosch: “Will do, ma’am.”

Sarah and Rosch quotes (if Sarah’s current HP < half max HP):
Sarah: “Where did I go wrong?”
Rosch: “Let’s think about that together. We’re a team after all.”
Sarah: “Of course. Two heads are better than one.”

Rosch and Sarah quotes:
Rosch: “How was my performance in that battle?”
Sarah: “Satisfactory. There’s always room for improvement after all.”
Rosch: “If there’s always room for improvement, satisfactory sounds like the best I’ll ever get from you.”

Sarah: “It looks like every fight is shaping you up to be more like a proper Shadow.”
Rosch: “I can see myself as a proper Shadow by now.”
Sarah: “That means you still have much to work on.”

Rosch and Victoria quotes (if fish was thrown by Victoria):
Rosch: “I could get you a Link Sphere, you know.”
Victoria: “I’m perfectly fine without it.”
Rosch: “Chucking fish is alright, but I’m sure everyone would like to be linked with you.”

Rosch and Victoria quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Victoria: “Do you need help understanding what went wrong?”
Rosch: “Of course I do. Two heads are better than one.”

Rosch and Victoria quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Rosch: “I won't have them die like the Shadows did.”
Victoria: “I'm with you this time, so don't bare that burden alone.”
Rosch: “I won't, thanks to you.”

Victoria: “Do they remind you of the Shadows?”
Rosch: “Yeah, but they’re different enough to snap me back to reality.”
Victoria: “Good. Please don't linger on the memories of your lost friends.”

Rosch and Alvis quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Alvis: “Let’s think about why.”
Rosch: “That’s one way of phrasing.”

Rosch and Alvis quotes (if fish was thrown by Alvis):
Rosch: “Don't you ever get tired of throwing fish?”
Alvis: “Not at all. It teaches me how monsters react to them.”
Rosch: “I’m not sure if I could keep it up.”

Rosch and Krissy quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Krissy: “Let me treat your wounds. Next time, let me know if you’re in any pain.”
Rosch: “Why do you have that look in your eye like you’re enjoying this, though?”

Rosch and Fausty quotes (if Rosch’s current HP < half max HP):
Rosch: “I’m such a wreck.”
Fausty: “This isn't a garbage dump, though.”
Rosch: “I noticed.”

Rosch and Fausty quotes:
Rosch: “You were tolerable, for once.”
Fausty: “Wow, did you finally get that stick up your butt removed? Good job!”
Rosch: “On second thought, never mind.”
Fausty: “And back in it goes.”

Fausty: “Did you see how good we were? That’s the power of friendship!”
Rosch: “You can't be serious.”
Fausty: “Oh, I’m always serious.”

Fausty and Victoria quotes (if fish was thrown by Victoria):
Fausty: “Having fun copying Alvis?”
Victoria: “It’s not for fun. It’s a learning experience for everyone else.”
Fausty: “Doesn't mean you aren't having fun!”

Fausty and Victoria quotes (if Fausty’s current HP < half max HP):
Fausty: “That sure was a close call.”
Victoria: “Then, learn from this experience.”
Fausty: “Already got it memorized, teach!”

Fausty and Victoria quotes (if no fish was thrown):
Fausty: “Need some help taking off those heavy clothes?”
Victoria: “I don't plan on undressing any time soon.”
Fausty: “Aw, you’re such a tease!”

Victoria: “Don't you feel unsafe with little clothing on?”
Fausty: “Don't you know the trope of less armor for women equals more protection?”
Victoria: “This isn't a game.”

Fausty and Alvis quotes (if fish was thrown by Alvis):
Fausty: “What do you do for raw fish smell?”
Alvis: “Ignore it.”
Fausty: “Or maybe you lost your sense of smell from a really stinky fish?”

Fausty and Alvis quotes (if Fausty’s current HP < half max HP):
Fausty: “That sure was a close call.”
Alvis: “Maybe you should fight with more caution.”
Fausty: “Caution sounds pretty boring, though. No wonder your fighting style seems like it’s out of a textbook.”

Fausty and Krissy quotes (if Fausty’s current HP < half max HP):
Fausty: “That sure was a close call.”
Krissy: “You’re so reckless! Please be more careful.”
Fausty: “Be more reckless? Sounds like a great idea!”

Fausty and Rosch quotes (if Fausty’s current HP < half max HP):
Fausty: “That sure was a close call.”
Rosch: “You only have yourself to blame.”
Fausty: “Yep, and I’m pretty glad I made it so death-defying!”

Victoria and Alvis quotes (if fish was thrown by Victoria):
Victoria: “How was that fish throwing?”
Alvis: “You threw that fish like a champ! Great job!”
Victoria: “Th-thank you.”

Alvis, Krissy, Rosch, Fausty, and Victoria (when all together in a team) victory quotes:
Alvis: “Those were some cool moves with your spiked boots.”
Krissy: “Not as cool as your fishing rod.”
Fausty: “Hey! Aren’t we forgetting how cool Gale is!?”
Rosch: “Or how creative my roped throwing knives are?”
Victoria: “You’re ruining their compliments.”
Alvis & Krissy: “Yeah...”
Fausty & Rosch: “Oh.”

Krissy: “Take that, monsters! These legs of mine aren’t just for show! Don’t you think, Rosch?”
Rosch: “Huh!? U-um, either way, you put on a heartracing performance.”
Fausty: “That was smooth, lover boy.”
Victoria: “Minus the surprise and hesitation.”
Alvis: “Can’t we just be happy for them?”

Rosch: “Is that all? I was just warming up.”
Victoria: “Feel free to fight the next battle by yourself then.”
Fausty: “We’ll be cheering you on from the sidelines!”
Alvis: “Good luck out there.”
Krissy: “A one-man-army can certainly handle things alone.”
Rosch: “Wait, don’t go! I was just bragging about how good we are!”

Fausty: “Team Girls won again!”
Rosch: “But your team has one more person than mine.”
Victoria: “Even though it’s unfair, she’s not wrong.”
Krissy: “Yeah, Team Boys will just have to work harder to beat us!”
Fausty: “Like that’ll ever happen, though.”
Victoria: “I’d like to see them try at least.”
Alvis: “You heard them, Rosch. Let’s give it our all next time.”

Victoria: “Our strength comes from—”
Alvis: “Strategy!”
Krissy: “Experience!”
Rosch: “Teamwork!”
Fausty: “Beauty!”
Victoria: “Just because we look good, that doesn’t mean it’s our strength.”

 

 

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Out of curiosity, have you been playing Octopath Traveler? That game makes pretty good use of exactly this idea.

My thoughts after a quick overview:

I get a feeling that Alvis is involved with school in some way. A professor? He reminds me a little too much of Octopath's Cyrus.

Victoria seems a little haughty.

Krissy is a pacifist. “That’s enough for now.” sticks out from the others to me, as it seems much less gentle.

Rorsh doesn't convey much personality except being a warrior? “The battle may be over but conflict isn’t.” sounds kind of weird. Do you mean "The conflict"? I think you should change this line.

Erwin is a slacker who doesn't care.

Mariel is a 'genki girl'.

Sarah is always serious.

Fausty is... extremely weird? Their first three line suggest someone imbued with themselves and confident and speaks florally, while their fourth and fifth suggest someone who has a very... casual attitude towards language. I feel like there's a conflict.

Some of the solo lines feel very generic and stilted. Of note:
“Phew, the battle’s over.”
“I managed to stay alive.”
“This was enough to pass with my life.”
“Thank goodness the fight’s done.” (This one is especially bland and unsatisfying. 'I am glad we are no longer fighting'.)

Meanwhile, I particularly like a few of these:

“I wish I could forget this ever happened.”
“If I must, I’ll fight anything in my way.”
“Out of sight and out of mind.”
“Wake me up when something interesting happens.”
“Operation Relax is a go-go!”
“Let’s celebrate victory AFTER we return to base.”
“You’ve wasted enough of our time.”
“Cue fanfare!”
“As if I could lose to the likes of you.”

You have a few grammar errors here and there; I would recommend running these through a corrector, and, ideally, by an editor.

There's a few too many group quotes for me to go through all of them right now, but “I wish I knew even half as much knowledge that you know.” sounds extremely awkward because of the repeated 'knew'/'know'. "I wish I knew even half as much as you do."

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3 hours ago, Feather Dreams said:

Out of curiosity, have you been playing Octopath Traveler? That game makes pretty good use of exactly this idea.

Fausty is... extremely weird? Their first three line suggest someone imbued with themselves and confident and speaks florally, while their fourth and fifth suggest someone who has a very... casual attitude towards language. I feel like there's a conflict.

Meanwhile, I particularly like a few of these:

“I wish I could forget this ever happened.”
“If I must, I’ll fight anything in my way.”
“Out of sight and out of mind.”
“Wake me up when something interesting happens.”
“Operation Relax is a go-go!”
“Let’s celebrate victory AFTER we return to base.”
“You’ve wasted enough of our time.”
“Cue fanfare!”
“As if I could lose to the likes of you.”

You have a few grammar errors here and there; I would recommend running these through a corrector, and, ideally, by an editor.

There's a few too many group quotes for me to go through all of them right now, but “I wish I knew even half as much knowledge that you know.” sounds extremely awkward because of the repeated 'knew'/'know'. "I wish I knew even half as much as you do."

No, I haven't been playing Octopath Traveler, but I can understand why you would think that. These are mostly based on the "Tales of" and "Xenoblade Chronicles" series of games since they have extraordinary victory conversations/monologues. The below spoiler box has two links to videos that show some inspiration for this idea.

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You pretty much nailed their personalities based on their choice of words. Rosch's usage of the word, "conflict," is an idealistic view that gets expanded on through the story, so I can understand why that might sound off-putting without context like what I just said. Fausty's really cocky, casual, sarcastic, and mischievously annoying when the opportunity presents itself, which is why you might've thought she seemed weird. Just like Rosch, some of her victory lines need some character context, too. Even though these victory lines, along with the generic and stilted lines you pointed out, needed context to fully understand them, I still wanted to know what everyone thought of them without context, so I can make sure what exactly to clarify the most in the story to give the clearest context.

Awesome! I'm glad you liked those. I was hoping there'd be a few at least that'd stick out, even without context.

Grammar errors such as what exactly? Since all of these are dialogues/monologues, the usages of commas can be omitted at certain places to show no pausing where you usually would think there'd be a comma. The opposite can be done, too, in case you want a person to pause their speech patterns in the middle of their sentences when they normally shouldn't have commas. If it's not that, I'm not sure what you could be referring to.

Ooooh, yes, I do agree with that last line you pointed out here. I'll go ahead and replace "know" with "do," like you recommended.

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