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  1. Stubborn (adj.) - Refusing to subscribe to another's belief or method of thinking.
  2. Tips on Writing and Development

    In my opinion, if there's an exception to every rule, then there are no rules, really. If I sat here and listed every single exception to every one of my guidlines, I doubt if people would remain interested for very long.
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    I think that copy-cat is kind of a form of inspiration, a very weak form, but a form nonetheless. I do think that the author should think about why they're writing the story, and what they hope to achieve with it. IT brings you to your events, helps you dictate how your events should unfold to bring you to the logical conclusion that you want to end up at, and the writer needs to be thinking about this during the entire design process. However, it must not overtake their thoughts because the author may twist the fabric of reality to fit their plotline. A writer has to be understanding of the fact that the rules of reality don't bend for them unless they wish to set the story in a science-fiction or fantasy setting, in which you also lose an audience.
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    Quote:Original post by Wai Re: Hudaw Could you return to this question: Quote:Original post by Wai Re: Timeline What is an example of timeline that you shouldn't make? Quote:Don't make a timeline on a piece of paper like you did for a book report in 1st Grade. What is an example of an outline that you should make? Quote:The first thing you have to do is look at the very big picture. When you created your plotline, you made a general outline (hopefully). I think timeline is an important asset in the design process. A timeline is a reference. The more you can document a concept, the more likely that another person can add to the content. Imagine the Gundam universe has no timeline. It wouldn't be able to expand as well as it is. (I am not a Gundam fan.) Re The Role of Story Quote:The story gives a reason for the player's actions in-game. The experience lends strength to the story. I agree that this is a reason. It follows the progression: tell, show, experience. The gaming medium allows the player to experience your world by being a character in the world. I want to point out an alternate expression that is closer to stimarco's perspective. "The scenario gives a context for the player's to interact in-game. The interpreted experience gives rise to the story." The subtle difference in this statement is that you as the designer dictate the environment, but not the story. The story depends on the player's decisions. The player does not perform action according to decisions made during the 'story'. The player instantiates the story by making decisions. I don't think that this is a necessarily a better design goal, although it could be, since MMORPG follows this design goal. Do you think that it is necessarily better? Very good questions. I'll do my best to answer them. In reference to the timeline, I don't mean this in the way of canon, I mean going to a piece of paper and going 'A happened, then b happened, then c happened.' To me, this just obstructs the entire thought process and forces you to leave out things that you wouldn't leave out when you're drawing it out on a piece of paper with arrows. I've never made a physical timeline using a straight line and the perpendicular event lines. I may work for some, but no one that I've ever met does this. I may just delete that remark, however, so that you for brining it up. In reference to the player dictating the story: I think I know what you're saying. You're saying that the player should feel that what they're doing in the game is influencing what's going to happen next, and not like they're being led down a straight pathway. This, I agree with, and I'll add this in there. I'm glad I'm getting some feedback that I can use here. In reference to the outline, what I'm referring to is sort of the way the timeline works, only this is something that doesn't take up 19 MB as an image on your computer. It's kind of like a book report, or when you outlined a chapter in a history book back in High School. While still fairly vague in terms of event number and depth, the outline should include important events, pivotal moments in the story, and some character-defining moments. Small side-quests and small-battle missions shouldn't really be included. This is especially useful if you're going to make more than one playable character. It's easier to first write about the main event that the characters engage in, then write the event for each character separately. This is to avoid random ideas finding their way into one character's plotline and be excluded from another, which may kind of throw off the story. Thank you for the questions. I will add those when I get the chance.
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    I'm curious as to whether you were arguing my points or supporting them, because you were all over the place with your opinions. Everything you are about to read is my profound opinion. I do not view it as hard fact: The writer's job is to write. I already stated your whole bit about having to cut characters, evens, cutscenes, and the like. Not only that, I never said that one cutscene would dump every possible personality trait on the character. Keep in mind that I did not say this is a rulebook. This is a guildine to creating a strong story. Do not say that experience overtakes writing, because the two work hand-in-hand. If one is lax, the chances are that the game will recieve poor ratings on all review websites and in magazines (people visit and read these, respectively) and players will not be interested in completing a single-player mode and will be therefore unmotivated to continue the game because nothing interesting is happening. The story gives a reason for the player's actions in-game. The experience lends strength to the story. The two must co-exist equally. Take a game like Mass Effect. Where would the game be without the story? No where. especially given that it's and RPG. But if it didn't have it's unique gameplay to coexist with the story the way it does, I doubt that the game would have sold as much as it did. Drew Karpshyn wrote the story before BioWare took hold of it. The story began before the game design did. They built a whole new engine around his storyline. And an RPG storyline as massive as Drew's is staggeringly difficult to plot. It's the kind of plot that you cannot conform to a game design concept. A story these days isn't told to educate, at least not in the sense that many people view the word 'story'. We think something fictional, not real. These stories are told to stimulate the mind into thinking in different ways. RPG games achieve a decision making ability that no other genre can, and that is the only genre in which the player can form his own story, especially in the case of Mass Effect, where you almost never finish the game with the same characters, plot, or abilities unless you try extremely hard. A writer is supposed to either enlighten, persuade, describe, educate, inform, or entertain. That is the main goal of the writer these days. In game writing, it is almost always the latter. Granted, you do have some word-game examples, or very well-worked mystery games that teach the user critical thinking skills, but these are not, in reality "stories". They're a series of puzzles, mazes, and guess-work based missions. So while your post has noble intent, I must strongly disagree with a lot of your opinions, though I will not say you are wrong.
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    Thank you for your help on the subject. I will definately take them into account and work on reforming this article. Sorry about all of my spelling errors. This keyboard has coke and cheetos all over it xD
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    I think you're slightly missing the point. I'm not saying that games are started from story every time. This is to the writers who have ideas that they want to turn into games, things they'd like to see in the plotline. This isn't for game developers all around, it's for the writers. You're not always going to get a job writing for the game and you can't always write on command. When you have a story and you need the team, the story has to be presented to the concept artists and the modellers who can turn your visions into something tangible. However, I will attempt to answer your questions 1. As said above, to the concept artists at the very least. 2. You present the story because this is what you will program around. In my eyes, the sngle player of a game should be an interactive story, not just some random movements and gameplay elements with a little bit of story thrown in. This is simply my opinion. People build new game engines for strong stories such as that of Mass Effect 3. The team is needed to build whatever elements the story involves into the game. If it involves large-scale AI control, the team is needed to program that and build an engine to support it or to use one to support it. 4. You don't form a team hoping that you'll only make one game, you hope there will be many more. And there is currently a team that posted on this forum that has to make a small game to make some money to support the creation of the main game, and that's what my team is doing as well. 5. Games aren't always about making money with the eception of the above case. Ever been to addictinggames.com? Case in point. Sometimes, you just want other people to enjoy your creation as much as you do. It's not for everybody, making freeware, but it is for some people. The business purpose of making the game rests soley with the team involved. It is their choice onif theey want to make money. This is of course, granted that they stay within the boundaries of the law. I hope I've answered your questions.
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    wow, my tips on writeing without error are full of errors. by professionals, I didn't mean in game corporations, I mean people who are very good at what they do. I guess I still have some work to do myself.
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    Because writing still has to do with the game design process. The writer has to be very active in this process, and if the writer is the team leader, he still has a responsibility, not only as the writer, but as a leader as well. So perhaps I chose the wrong title and went against my own rules xD
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    Finished. The topic is now open to suggestions.
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    That's not a bAD idea, but I wanted to post it here to help the writers the develop games. I may probably just add Chapter 3 onto the Chapter 2 post
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    It wouldn't be a bad thing, but I would appreciate if it could wait until I've finished posting Chapter 3
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    Chapter 2 - Presentation -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- --------------------------------------------------- Section 2.1 - Why It's Crucial --------------------------------------------------- Presentation is possibly the one thing that many people have so much difficulty with. They have High School classes for this, people ignore them, and then wonder why they can't communicate their ideas with clarity. Well, you can either take a class, or listen up. The second one is much cheaper and only costs a dime of your $24.95 a month for Internet. It is very important that your presentation be very appealing and very organized. Professionals look for this kind of thing and will be more drawn to your project if, not only is your idea intriguing, but your presentation is clean and attractive. I cannot tell you how many potential ideas I have seen ruined because the presentation was rushed and sloppy. Remember that your presentation says a lot about you as well. It shows if you're willing to take the time to clean things up, to make things not only be exciting and interesting, but to look that way as well. This will surely take practice but will pay off in the long run, as tedious as it may seem now. --------------------------------------------------- Section 2.2 - Successful Presentation --------------------------------------------------- People like to see colors, different fonts, styles, and a little bit of white space. If the forum you're presenting on disables colors, such as GameDev does, then opt for the other 3. Check the headings of each of the sections in this handbook. IF you notice, they are separated by some whitespace and are bolded and italicized. It also may be a good idea to use some dashes to separate them. People are very visual, and you have to help your readers separate ideas as much as possible. Not only that, but make sure that when you begin your post, you have an outline of everything you want to cover in a separate word document for reference. You don't necessarily have to post it as I have done with the Table of Contents, but make sure you have your ideas well organized. Also, be sure to check for mandatory templates, such as the one that GameDev uses. In addition, be careful not to use uncommon language. Your presentation isn't a school essay, it's an advertisement, of sorts. Try to be down-to-earth, and definately make sure that everything is capitalized correctly, puncuation is implace, spelling is good, etc., because these things, while they seem tedious and unnecessary, go a very long way. Try reading a post without punctuation, or proper spelling. It is very difficult to see where one idea ends and another begins. Capitalization isn't crucial, but it adds to the attractiveness of the post when the correct words are capitalized. ----------------------------------------------- Section 2.3 - Accepting Criticism ----------------------------------------------- The toughest thing to sit through, not just for writers, but for anybody, is negative criticism, but let's cover the different kinds. Constructive criticism seems to be our favorite. We hear good things about our writing and a few suggestions, but there's nothing negative about our ideas. The author of the positive post seems to enjoy your thoughts and has little to say to the contrary. This kind of post boosts our morale and drives us onward with more ideas just as good if not better than the others. We adore this post because we feel accomplished. This kind of post also takes you away from the truth momentarily...your writing simply is not perfect. Though the first few posts said nothing bad, that doesn't mean you can't make improvements. In fact, many people take positive criticism as their cue that they are done with the story. This is an aboslutely awful idea. While this criticism is the best for raising self-esteem, it's the worst for spurring on a better storyline. The second kind of criticism is the least common: Objective criticism. The author of the critique doesn't let his feelings over the storyline, genre, or presentor get in the way of his judgement, and this is very hard to pull off. You get honest feedback on what is good and what needs to be improved. This kind of critique is very down to earth and still very friendly while remaining perfectly objective.Very few times will it boost your self esteem, but it will give you insight on what you should look into changing or removing. While you may not admire the author of this criique, you should respect his opinion simply because it is the toughest criticism to produce, and more often than not, it is correct. The final criticism is the one we all dread: negative criticism. Very few people want to hear their ideas put down and stomped into the mud, but a select few do...and those are the great writers. While it may lower your self-esteem, negative critiques give you almost brutally honest viewpoints of everytinhg wrong with your idea. While some may be biased, they are still things you need to look a and consider. It is very tough to take to heart, and occasionally you want to punch the guy right in the mouth for how rudely he points out your rather less-than-perfect ideas. But it helps you grow as a person and a writer to see your mistakess and change them based on their biased and rude viewpoints of others. Also, don't respond to such a post. It's a complete waste of your time. ------------------------------------------- Section 2.4 - If It's Ignored ------------------------------------------- This is a very difficult topic to get through to people who seem to get their ideas shot down. I won't make this section long. It's very disappointing when you post your idea and no one seems to respond to it. You sit on your computer all day, refreshing the page only to see that you have gotten no replies and gained only 2 views. It's very disheartening to know that you seemingly wasted your time and that your idea must be awful. Do not think this, it is simply the wrong way to feel. If your idea is ignored, it may be that a topic was recently posted that has spurred a lot more interest, and your post was lost in the heat. If this is the case, wait a few days for the insanity to die down and then, ever so lightly, bump your topic with the word, *bump*. Another tactic is to add ideas to the post while it's being ignored. IF you can clean up your presentation and errors before anyone gets to it, it'll go a long way. If this fails, try another forum. It may just be that you have to repeat the outlined steps in sections 1.1-2.2. If you've done that, and still nothing happens, it may be best just to find another hobby. You may not be cut out for writing. If you really love games, you'll try programming, coding, mapping, or modelling. Don't give up on the gaming community just yet ;). ------------------------------------------------------------ This marks the end of Chapter 2 - Presentation ------------------------------------------------------------ --------------------------------------- ======================================= ======================================= --------------------------------------- Chapter 3 - From Paper to Program ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------- Section 3.1 - Forming the Team -------------------------------------------- Now that you have written and presented your ideas, as well as accepted or denied applications, it's time to bring your team together. OF course, this part of the process has nothing to do with writing the game, so I may cover that in a separate article. The writer's job, when forming or joining the team, is to have a personal discussion with nearly every team member or section leader. You have to inform everyone, personally of the story and how it pertains to their job. While you may not have time to do this in live chat with everyone, you can E-mail people. Pick a group to start out with, say the Concept Artists, and create one e-mail, and then forward it to the whole concept team. Continue this with every group: programmers, voice actors, mappers, etc. You will most likely be asked questions, so answer them. Do not stand apart from your team, otherwise they will have no idea what to do as far as single-player is concerned. ----------------------------------------------- Section 3.1 - Rebuilding the Plot ----------------------------------------------- While you must stay out of everyone else's business, the chance of people giving you suggestions are very high. Team members who have no writing experience whatsoever will toss you their ideas. Your job, as the writer, is to, at the very least, truly consider these ideas, because while you are not a coder/programmer/artist and cannot suggest anything in these fields, everybody has ideas, and there is a good chance that some of them are very good. It always helps to have another set of eyes on the project. Aside from this, you're going to have to do something very difficult. Do you remember when I said that the idea-making process is the second hardest part of writing? Well you're about to do the toughest thing right now: you're going to have to change all of your ideas and plot elements. This is, if you are part of a select group. This is something that every game writer dreads: their ideas not being able to be produced in the game. For most of you, your ideas are not so massive that computing power can't handle them for the next few years (and remember that computing power doubles continuously every two or three years). For those of you dreaming up something a little more massive than Mass Effect, you're going to have to change a few things, unless you're willing to do what James Cameron did with Avatar and wait 20 years to release your story. ----------- Just a side-note, but you would think that, over the course of 20 years, he would have found a way to make that movie a little stronger. This is a side-lesson. If your writing sits around and you wanna whip it out, change a few things and work on it. Chances are that you'll hate half of what you read if you've matured as a writer since you first formulated your idea. ----------- Your team will let you know if your ideas are within their abilities or modern-day computing power. If they aren't, you may have to change your story a little bit, and possibly even shorten it. ------------------------------ Having to Change ------------------------------ It's very difficult to change anything about your plot. It's set in stone, right? Several of your sequences are based around gameplay ideas that can't be handled. These sequences are also key in the story...or so you think. The first thing you have to do is look at the very big picture. When you created your plotline, you made a general outline (hopefully). Decide what you can remove from your plot that isn't in the outline and won't risk making the story vague. Make sure that everything you have is totally necesarry and cannot, in any way, be removed without risking the intergrity of the tale you have woven since day 1. If you can't do this, put it away and try another idea. Wait it out for a couple years. Your idea probably won't be taken, at least not exactly. However, if there are elements that you can remove, make sure that you do so without leaving a giant space between plot events like you just yanked your own tooth out. IF you need to, don't be ashamed to get suggestions from your team. Don't be afraid to let them know that you're struggling a little bit. Let them help you, because then everybody will be aware of the changes you've made, and this helps the concept artists especially. It's a tough stage of the development process, but if you get through it, you have a great chance of getting the game constructed. ----------------------------------------- Section 3.4 - Communicating ----------------------------------------- You have to be actively speaking with your team and accessible at all times. There is nothing worse than a writer or project leader who can't be contacted when needed. This doesn't mean you need to troll the internet and stay on the computer until you enter an epilleptic seizure. It means that, every moment you have free, you should be on a predetermined form of live-chat, and if you cannot be, you should check your E-mail whenever it's convenient. If you are going to be away from the project, let people know and appoint a second-in-command who shares your vision and ideas and knows what you want. Do not just disappear without a trace. Excuse my informality, but that's a great way to piss people off. IF you are easily accessible, your team will work like a well-oiled clock. You must be ready to respond to any questions or problems that the team has and be able to formulate and intelligent, or at least, honest response. If you don't know the answer to a problem, do not give a false answer in hopes that you're right, and don't simply say that you don't know. Research it, look it up, find out the solution to a problem. The internet is huge. Someone else has surely had the same problem. ------------------------------------------------------------------- Section 3.5 - Working With More Than Just the Writers ------------------------------------------------------------------- By this time, you should know that there is more to the team than the writing staff. You will need to communicate with everyone. I would like to share with you one lesson that I have learned the difficult war. I was the lead writer for a project titled Era of Darkness. It was to be a star Wars game, available for free. Circumstances prevented me from writing, so I handed my position to someone else until I was able to return. When I did return, I noticed the project was at a standstill, so I hijacked other people's jobs, specifically mapping and music. Let me tell you that this does not blow over well. While you need to be involved, do not look over everyone's shoulder all the time, even if you are the project lead. Give people their space. As the writer, your job is to write, not do anything else. Unless you think that products developed by the team do not fit the story, let them do their jobs. Trust me. Please, I beg you. However, this does not mean you should isolate yourself. You should be actively looking at people's work, while not dictating every single detail. Not every product will fit your exact vision, and it shouldn't have to, but it should be vaguely close. Be carefully not to be too much of a perfectionist because this will really vex people. Be close, but not too close. Give people space, but not too much space. ---------------------------------------- Section 3.6 - Finalization ---------------------------------------- If everything else in the game creation process has happened, it's about time to begin discussing cutscenes, which means speaking with your voice actors, should you have them. If you do, you will have to make sure to inform them of each character so that they interpret the script correctly as you have laid it out. However, may I remind you that if you tell them exactly how to act in every single cutscene, you might as well do the voice acting yourself, which may not be a badidea unless you cannot voice act. This goes right back to giving people space. Also, your actors will probably have suggestions as well. I cannot stress enough that you must consider them. Make sure that your dialogue is strong and exactly where you want it before you had it to the voice actors. Nothing ruins a cutscene more than a corny line that you forgot to look at. By the time you realise your mistake, it will probably already be all over the internet. You've come too far to let the game be ruined by a crappy cutscene. Don't quit now. Drive all the way through. You may think that you're out of energy, out of ideas, but you're not. Keep digging deep for some new material. It'll come to you. --------------------------------------- Section 3.7 - The Wrap-Up --------------------------------------- You're almost done, don't give up now. I'm talking about the article. You're done with the game at this stage, most likely. You face a lot of questions after the game is released, mainly the big one: "What's next?". IF you enjoyed working with the team and the feeling is mutual, it may be a good idea just to talk to each other online and keep in contact. Unless you've planned on making a sequel, you will part ways and work on other projects, but your first team shares a special bond, as cliche as this sounds. Remember each other when you have an open position for their focus. You just made some great friends...if the project went well, that is. Don't forget these guys or gals. They probably won't forget you. You'll see each other on the street someday and won't know it, but you'll see their screenname online and you'll be tempted to talk to them. Do it. Stay connected. You have made some really good friends. Keep each other up to date on what you're doing. If you make money from your game, don't be in too much of a rush to make another. Sit back and enjoy the income. And rememeber, video games are not life. While you make a living off of writing for them, they are not the most important thing in your life. It is a very well-paying hobby, game design. Don't take it to far. Don't ruin your life. Enjoy the people you see around you daily, and while you will have to connect to your game team, don' disconnect from your family and friends. Thank you for taking the time to read this article. I hope that you learned something from this and that it will help you through your next big idea. Happy Gaming! [Edited by - Hudaw on June 18, 2010 2:53:07 AM]
  15. ------------------------------- Table of Contents ------------------------------- Forming the story 1.1 - Introduction 1.2 - How to Begin 1.3 - Getting It On Paper 1.4 - Organizing 1.5 - Adding the Details 1.6 - Proofreading 1.7 - Proofreading Again Presentation 2.1 - Why It's Crucial 2.2 - Successful Presentation 2.3 - Accepting Criticism 2.4 - If It's Ignored From Paper to Program 3.1 - Forming the Team 3.2 - Rebuilding the Plot 3.3 - Having To Change 3.4 - Communicating 3.5 - Working With More Than the Writers 3.6 - Finalization 3.7 - The Wrap-Up ======================================== ---------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------- ======================================== ---------------------------------------- Section 1.1 - Introduction ---------------------------------------- This giant post is intended to help you figure out, not just the do's and don't's of writing in general, but also the construction of the game. The writer has to be very involved in the construction process, but also has to know when to give people their space. These chapters cover all of these things, plus some extra tidbits that I've learned trying to start up some games. I will be using examples on how to create, edit, and present a compelling game plotline that players will thouroughly enjoy. ---------------------------------------- Section 1.2 - How To Begin ---------------------------------------- This is the second toughest part of the entire creative process - creating the story. Beware, this story will not come to you in a day, most likey. Most great storylines take days of formulating characters and events, and that's just the basics. If a storyline consisted of the first thoughts that popped into a writer's head, the story would be boring and unexciting. While your main points are easily your setting, plot twist, and ending, these three alone cannot form a good story for a game. You begin with an idea. Something you're watching, playing, listening to, or seeing on a billboard, even, can motivate and inspire you with just one idea. From that idea, your entire car ride becomes a ride of thought as your run red lights and ignore police officers flashing their lights at you. The next thing you know, you're on the most recent episode of Cops. Of course, it doesn't exactly happen this way, but fairly close to it. Something inspires you, and you build upon it. From this initial idea branch characters, events, twists, and great dialogue sequences. You decide not to write it down just yet, and this is not a bad or good idea. If your ideas are that great, you will remember them. If you have poor memory, write it somewhere in your notebook, journal, computer, on your arm, wherever you will remember it. Over the course of approximately five days, you will have a lot of ideas that you can't get straight. This is where you funnel your energy and begin forming the plot. ----------------------------------------------- Section 1.2 - Getting It On Paper ----------------------------------------------- So you have a ton of ideas swirling around inside your head and you don't know what to begin first. Sit at your desk in front of a pen, pencil and paper, or a keyboard and monitor, or even on your iTouch or iPad (I have done this on an iTouch many times). Write the ideas as they come. Don't think about what comes first, just write. You'll spend anywhere from 10 minutes to 1 hour on this, depending upon the size, shape, and complexity of your plot. The reason you do this is because very few people can organize their ideas as they write them. Do not fool yourself into thinking that you are one of them because, chances are, you are not. If you are, you'll know it, but you're probably not, so just listen to me for right now. When you look at your 1 - 5 pages of random thoughts and ideas that formed as you wrote, you notice that they are no chronological order...at all. Unless you're one of those people mentioned above, you're going to have to reorganize. This is where classic pencil and paper come in hand. -------------------------------------- Section 1.3 - Organizing -------------------------------------- On paper, you can draw arrows, cross things out, and do double-arrows because it is much easier than the "control-x ... control-v" or the "control-c ... control-v" formula of the computer keyboard. Also, it helps to visual recognize what you are moving, removing, or reformulating. So look at your thoughts as written on your monitor. Scroll down, if you can, and keep looking. Sit and think for a second. That's right, don't do anything but sit and think long and hard. Think these thoughts: Where am I going to start the story? Why am I going to start there instead of somewhere else? Who is my main character? What is he/she like? why is he/she like this? Why is he in the position that he is in? Can I tell his background with a good flashback?* Who is the antagonist? Why is he/she like? Etc. *If the flashback travels to time before you want to tell your story (as in the starting point of the game), it is still considered the beginning of your story. Develop everything from the start of the flashback timeline to the start of your game. You get the idea. These are just a few of the questions to ask yourself. Now you get to deepen the story with a little more...depth. ---------------------------------------------- Section 1.4 - Adding the Details ---------------------------------------------- No good story just has the basics. Every riveting story that you've ever seen, read, or played, had intricate details that hinted at character traits, past events, or even strengthened events to come. These are elements that any writer who wants to create a compelling book, screenplay, stageplay, or game should know. The details of your game need to accomplish one of three things: Allusion to past events Foreshadowing Revelation of character trait (strength and flaw) While a certain detail should only accomplish one of these things at a time, all of these things should be accomplished, but spread evenly before the plot twist/climax of your story. Adding these details doesn't necessarily mean adding dialogue and the length of the main character's cowlick. Just event details. Don't make a timeline on a piece of paper like you did for a book report in 1st Grade. We're all adults now. Just add events that will add to the depth of the story. I really don't know another way to say this. ---------------------------------------- Section 1.5 - Proofreading ---------------------------------------- Ah, the best part of the writing process. Note the sarcasm. Proofreading actually is one of the most constructive parts of writing. We are, often, our own worst critics. We note our flaws in writing, ideas, structure, and even use of numbers (depending upon your plot). Go through and fix, not only sentence structure and spelling, but your flow of ideas. Sometimes a writer will place an idea in the wrong spot because that's the exactl moment that he thought of it. This happenes, so catch it an fix it. While it probably won't show up in the game, the readers will be thrown for a loop when an idea is presented out of place. While you're proofreading, use paragraphs to separate general ideas. One thing that I've noticed when proofreading other writing is that everything gets turned into one large massive paragraph that makes it difficult to discern from one idea and the next. ---------------------------------------------- Section 1.6 - Proofreading Again ---------------------------------------------- Yeah, that thing you just did? Do it again. Also, it helps to get a family member or close friend to do the proofreadings. You always need another set of eyes on what you've written, because sometimes, when you spot mistakes, occasionaly you will refuse to admit that it is a mistake and leave it as a mistake. Also, some family and friends may bring up grammatical mistakes that you never even realized were mistakes. This will go a long way in presentation. ----------------------------------------------------------------- This marks the end of Chapter 1 - Forming the Story ----------------------------------------------------------------- [Edited by - Hudaw on June 18, 2010 11:28:06 AM]