Hello, i've been working on a platformer game (Jump and shoot genre) with ninjas..But when i've passed to the story, i've found a problem..That i didn't write stories..So, i would like to take your feedback and suggestions on my little story..(Including: Intro, Dialogues and Ending)..Also, i've got a problem, I suck in naming any characters/clans with japanese names..So, would you help me?
Intro:
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It starts in an unknown time..In a ninja clan called (I would need help in naming this)..Ryu, also known as NinjaCube is going to marry Hatsune.
But, at the marriage day..Hatsune is missing! They found a piece of paper in her house..It was wrote: "Hatsune is mine, Now she is kidnapped by me..The master of (An evil clan which i like to have help from you)"...Now, the ninjas from this clan are spreading chaos! Ryu must stop them all!
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Dialogues:
(I would like to have your suggestions on names for the enemy ninjas..Note: Big text wall)
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Vs WoodNinja:
WoodNinja: Well well well..You did come!
NinjaCube: (WoodNinja), Why did you do this?!
WoodNinja: Kidnapping Hatsune? She is for our master..And, we could gain more power!
NinjaCube: But..We, we were friends!
WoodNinja: This is from the past..Now, get ready!
NinjaCube: Hmph, I will show you!
Vs LavaNinja:
LavaNinja: You were able to pass over my volcano?!
NinjaCube: Yes, now..You have to tell me about one thing..Where is your master?
LavaNinja: I will never tell anyone about my master or my mission!
NinjaCube: Okay..Then, get ready!
Vs AquaNinja:
AquaNinja: Hehehe..You came!
NinjaCube: All of you say these words..Enough!
AquaNinja: It seems that you don't wanna know about your lovely Hatsune..Hehehehe!
NinjaCube: Rrrr..How, how dare you?!
AquaNinja: You hate that people talk about Hatsune? Don't worry, she is for our master now!
NinjaCube: Rrrrr..Just, stop, this!
Vs ThunderNinja:
ThunderNinja: You will be unable to pass me.
NinjaCube: You? I will beat you.
ThunderNinja: Then, enough talk! Be prepared!
NinjaCube: Okay!
Vs CopyNinja(aka. master of that evil clan):
CopyNinja: Finally, the one who dares to fight me did really come!
NinjaCube: Where is Hatsune? What did you do to her?!
CopyNinja: Hatsune? She is the that container..She is almostly gone..Hehehehe!
NinjaCube: You..
CopyNinja: Oh, She didn't tell you? I was going to marry her..But you've appeared! Because of you..We've broke up!
NinjaCube: So, you kill her?!
CopyNinja: Heh, smart one..But, you aren't powerful..Now, be prepared!
Vs Final CopyNinja(aka. ultimate form):
CopyNinja: Heh..You are powerful..But, you didn't see anything of Hatsune's power merged with mine!
NinjaCube: What?! You are going to kill her!
CopyNinja: Beware..My final form!
After Defeating Final CopyNinja:
CopyNinja: No..This can't be happening! I'm unable to die! NOOOOOO!
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Ending:
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After defeating CopyNinja..Hatsune falls from the container..NinjaCube catches her..A little dialogue starts:
NinjaCube: Hatsune..Are you alive?
Hatsune: Is..Is that..You..Ryu?