my idea for an original rpg; please help

grine · 2002-04-11T15:19:45

Hi. This is my first post here and I'd like to ask you guys if you like my idea for an RPG, instead of the usual cliched stuff you see. Bye the way, this idea isn't finished and i'd like any ideas or criticism. When this game's finished, I'm going to put it on my website for download the address for my site is by the way, i need advice. Once you've read this full article and replied, can you please tell me what programming language I should do this in, and what free compiler i should use (it has to be one that compiles under Windows). the languages i know are: HTML C C++ java-script Perl Okay. The game's set in another reality, and you belong to a race called the Twevens. You are an 11 year old named Motu, and are the general's son. Your country and another country (Karochiae) are at war with each other and you don't know why. Anyway, a bomb attack from the Karochiaens wipes out the Tweven capital city, killing millions, including your father. Fortunately, you and about 100 other Twevens escape. You and 7 friends ride a boat. It crashes and sinks, and you find a sunken Karochiaen submarine. You board it, and find 100 years worth of food, liquid and air. For the next 3 years, you and your friends create weapons and train for a rebel assault on the Karochiaens. When you're ready, you are unable to find a way to the surface, since you don't know how to pilot a submarine. Suddenly though, the ship starts moving to the surface. You then find out that the submarine is AI programmed, and has psychic abilities and knew what you wanted and were doing. The submarine had developed free will and hated it's masters and hid itself in the depths of the ocean, and wants revenge for being enslaved. When you land, you discover that the Karochiaens have taken over your country. You also find out that there are several resistance factions fighting the Karochiaens. You get captured by one group, who believe you to be traitors, as you were riding a Karochiaen sub. They imprison you in their underground base, stealing your weapons. Weeks later, a Karochiaen force assaults the base, takes it over, and imprisons the resistance faction that caught you. The faction then realises that you're not allies with the Karochiaens. You and the others plan and eventually you capture the base again. Later an elite Karochiaen team attack and kill 3 members of your team and 10 members of the other team, leaving a total of 8 people on your side (Motu included.) You form one alliance and go into hiding in a complex cave system at the beach. Fortunately, before you left you took back your weapons. Motu goes and spies on a Karochiaen town and finds out about a small island to the northeast where the surviving Twevens live. You and 4 others manage to hijack a cargo ship headed for another country (i forget the name of this country) and after a few months, arrive at the island. You spy on the people andare shocked to see such disgusting slums where only a few dozen people live. You assume the others died. On your way home, there is terrible weather and 3 of you get terribly sick (later they get better). Anyway, when you get home, you plan to go back and train the people to fight, so a major battle can begin, an equivalent of D-day. When you tell the others at home this, they think it's a good idea, but only one of your group can go, because everyone else is sick (Motu included). The chosen one goes and doesn't come back. When you go into town to spy on people you find that the Karochiaen army have launched a missile onto the island at the same time as the chosen one was their. Your group is saddened. Anyway, I haven't decided what goes here but there is an important plot twist that explains why this war is occuring. You see, it turns out that your species, the Twevens, are aliens. And the reason you look so similar to the Karochiaens (except for skin color) is because back when your species entered the planet, some Karochiaen females were raped, creating a cross-breed. Then it turns out that the Karochiaens didn't want to share land with the original breed of Twevens (this was about 900 years ago). The Karochiaens forced the Twevens to stay on a little group of islands. The Twevens didn't want this, and retaliated by threatening to kill an important head of government of the Karochiaens. Then a war broke out and has been continuing for many years.... Anyway, Motu decides that both races were at wrong and spends time feeling confused, not sure what side he belongs to. It also turns out that since only a dozen or so people lived on the island, there is another island where Twevens live. That's all I've though of so far. Please reply to this. I need some help with plotting this. BTW, the battles in this won't be random, as not many people like random battles. If you invent a time machine and travel back and forward through time, what would happen if you travelled to the time when the Universe doesn''t exist anymore? Edited by - grine on January 10, 2002 5:50:46 PM

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Started by grine January 10, 2002 12:29 AM

25 comments, last by grine 22 years ago

foobar

122

January 24, 2002 06:06 PM

i agree for 14-15 being a good choice, because this should be your "targeted customer group" (im german-speaking, dont know the right phrase, but i hope i made myself clear).
will help them to sympathize/identify with the main-character.

bye,
-- foobar

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Anonymous

April 06, 2002 12:02 PM

quote:Original post by grine

Okay.
The game''s set in another reality, and you belong to a race called the Twevens. You are an 11 year old named Motu,

Shouldn''t that be the eleven''s then lol

Taharez

203

April 06, 2002 02:21 PM

TechnoHydra:
Considering that it''s and alternate reality and all, couldn''t they be living on a slow-revolving planet? So his eleven years would be like 20 or something for us. Or their race could have a much faster maturing rate, so an 11-year old would be ocnsidered adult. =)

Jason Zelos

211

April 06, 2002 03:13 PM

I only have one question, where''s the gameplay ?

It sounds like a novel but this is a game, what choices do your players have, can they change the course of this war, pilot the submarine, drink themselves into a stupor. I like the premis but I think you need to allow for your players to change things, quite important things. You need to keep them stuck to the screen trying to affect their own choice of objectives, within reason.

,Jay

SoakinKittens

122

April 08, 2002 05:30 PM

There is a show on SCI-FI ( or was when I was in the dorm ). Pretty stupid really ( I didn''t watch it much ), but the space ship they had was intelligent, i think. If your submarine was intelligent, you could have part of your puzzles / role playing be trying to convince the submarine that: 1) it should like you / work with you / not kill you off like the original crew ( perform some feat for it, fix the engine/computer/whatever. ( On second thought, this is very stock. The submarine should want to find a mate or something. Instead of the "go here, collect item, return it to me" thing, You have to perform a matchmaking service or something odd for it. ) ) 2: that it wants to go where you want it to go. Submarines are offshoots of deep water sharks or something. It doesn''t WANT to go up to where it can get sunburned or eaten by dolphins. It LIKES deep water. to get it to land on shore consists of long hours of therapy and "you can do it" sessions.

Maybe this is cliche too, but i''m just making this up as i go.

mumboi

122

April 08, 2002 07:16 PM

Concerning the dream...

It would still be cliched but much cooler if after the hero saves the world or whatever he wakes up..back on the sub. Finds out they''re trapped and have like 30 minutes of air left or the bad guys come in and capture them or something.

EricTrickster

142

April 11, 2002 03:19 PM

Without going into too much of a critique, why does this sound - initially - like a modified, aquatic version of the tv show "Andromeda"?

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